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A Dare

March 18, 2010
By MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me<br /> As you&#039;re longing to sing&quot; -AFI<br /> <br /> &quot;Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I&#039;m afraid you&#039;re never satisfied.&quot; -Neon Trees


My heart pounded as I lied on the tracks. How the hell did I always get myself into these situations? Because I didn’t want to be showed up by Jimmy. I heard the train in the distance, the cheers of the other kids who stood a few feet away from the tracks, the ringing of the train-crossing signs. I DARE YOU, I DARE YOU, I DARE YOU! Their voices rang in my head.

Just a few more seconds; a few more seconds. The train whistle grew louder and louder. Good enough.

I jumped up and heard a loud pop and my leg gave out. I crumpled back to the ground, which was when the pain started. I yelped when I saw the source, my ankle was jammed between two rails in the track. Oh no. I pulled on my ankle and gasped as a wave of pain streamed up my leg. I could see the train begin to appear in the distance.

Panic set in. Gritting my teeth, I ignored the burning pain and pulled and twisted my leg, trying anything to get free. I yanked until I saw stars but my ankle wouldn’t budge. The train was getting closer. I screamed wordlessly and turned to the other kids. They didn’t seem to realize something was wrong, they were probably thinking how gutsy I was to be staying on the tracks so long. After all, I was the self-proclaimed Queen of Dares.

“Help!” They couldn’t hear me over the train. I tried crawling off the tracks but didn’t get very far. I DARE YOU, I DARE YOU! “Guys, please help me!” The train was on top of me.

I DARE YOU!


The author's comments:
I've been writing for as long as I remember and this is about the shortest story I've ever written. It was also probably the quickest I've ever written, since I just came up with the idea yesterday.

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on Jun. 30 2010 at 1:23 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me<br /> As you&#039;re longing to sing&quot; -AFI<br /> <br /> &quot;Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I&#039;m afraid you&#039;re never satisfied.&quot; -Neon Trees

thank you :)

on Jun. 30 2010 at 11:09 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I&#039;d rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn&#039;t do.<br /> -Red Scott

This is wonderful, it is short, but the length seems perfect to me. five out of five... again! ;-)

Keaira BRONZE said...
on Jun. 18 2010 at 4:26 pm
Keaira BRONZE, Edmond, Oklahoma
3 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
In a world of CooCoo Puffs, dare to be a Fruity Pebble.

My cousion's friend died this way.  It was a dare.  he would stand on the tracks untill thr train came and then jump off.  They were drunk and he didn't jump off in time.

on May. 12 2010 at 8:47 pm
gollyitshannah PLATINUM, Woodbridge, Connecticut
25 articles 6 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;So you want a heart? You don&#039;t know how lucky you are not to have one. Hearts will never be practical until they are made unbreakable&quot;

omg this was intense. It was breathtaking.

you are an amazing writing.

check out my stuff??


on Apr. 6 2010 at 3:22 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me<br /> As you&#039;re longing to sing&quot; -AFI<br /> <br /> &quot;Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I&#039;m afraid you&#039;re never satisfied.&quot; -Neon Trees

haha wow! It means so much to me when people like my stuff :)

SageSin GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 9:50 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets.&quot;

AWE STRIKING! I love your pieace adn I am Going to favorite it! ~

 

////,...,^  <------This is fang he says: IM NOT GONNA CRY I SWEAR!


on Apr. 3 2010 at 10:37 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me<br /> As you&#039;re longing to sing&quot; -AFI<br /> <br /> &quot;Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I&#039;m afraid you&#039;re never satisfied.&quot; -Neon Trees

aw well thank you very much!! :)

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 3 2010 at 8:03 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

Short and AMAZING!!!! I just love this! Very mysterious.

on Mar. 28 2010 at 9:21 am
nitegirl BRONZE, Myrtle, Missouri
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beacause 10 billion years time is so fragile, so emepheral... it arouses such a bittersweet, almost heartbreaking foundness<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> - its from a show i used to watch that i can&#039;t remeber the name of

wow that wuz amazing

very good but u should write more to it (idk how how mayb add wat the darers thoughts were)


on Mar. 27 2010 at 2:29 pm
AlyssaFama SILVER, Kunkletown, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
Most people want to be the sun that brightens your day. I&#039;d rather be the moon that shines down on you in your darkest hour.

wow this was really amazing and very suspensful! great work