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Watch the Butterflies MAG

June 16, 2014
By Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is too short to be anything but happy."


Bare as bones,
My skele-
-ton frailly sha-
Shakes
As I-
I
Struggle
To stand.

So thin
And weak,
I am wide open

For someone
To break
Me again.

A breeze passes
Through my

Empty
Chest

After all,
My heart is
Long gone,

Stolen,

And never given back.

I shud-
-der
As my ribs turn cold
And a tickling sensation
Vanishes

Very

Slowly

As I watch the butterflies
Fly out of me.

Now
I am free.


The author's comments:
For this poem, I tried to depict the coldness and fragileness of a person who has just gotten their heart broken. The butterflies refer to the butterflies one gets in their stomach when they see the person he or she loves, and so to have those butterflies leave means that the person is slowly letting go and beginning to move on.

This poem was partly inspired by my own heartbreak as well as e.e. cummings' distinctive style in which he uses punctuation and structure especially to emphasize his message.

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on Oct. 11 2014 at 12:10 am
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is too short to be anything but happy."

Thanks! I just found out today they published it because I received a copy of the magazine!! Thanks for your support!! c:

on Oct. 11 2014 at 12:10 am
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is too short to be anything but happy."

Thanks!!! I just got the published copy with it in it; I didn't know until I saw it! Thanks so much for your support!

on Aug. 27 2014 at 7:18 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Oh geez luis, I'm so glad! I'm so glad they published this! Congrats! You really deserve it ^_^

on Aug. 27 2014 at 5:21 am
Miss_Orange SILVER, Makati, Other
6 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm OK, I'm Fine and I'm alright are the greatest lies people tell each other everyday." By Me.

Congratulations on getting published Rosie!! I am so proud of you!  

on Jul. 22 2014 at 2:36 am
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is too short to be anything but happy."

I'm so flattered. Thank you so much; to be quite honest, I was surprised when you said I mastered it because this was my first official attempt with this style. I appreciate everything you said though, and I believe you can definitely master it!

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on Jul. 4 2014 at 1:26 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I'm impressed by your ability to master this technique of writing. I have tried first hand with this technique but have not been able to master it with such dexterity. The poem itself is fluent, and not staccato-ey, which some poems featuring this sort of writing can be. I liked the imagery and the emotion. Well done. 

on Jun. 20 2014 at 2:36 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I can't help, but say this again. I really love the poem.   : )

on Jun. 19 2014 at 3:11 pm
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is too short to be anything but happy.&quot;

Thank you so much! This poem was an exception to my usual style, so it's good to see that it was worth venturing out of my normal writing. And no, thank you.

on Jun. 19 2014 at 10:42 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I love it, I love how you did it. You're really talented. I really liked how you put the words. I'm honord, that you shared this. Thank you.

on Jun. 18 2014 at 2:07 am
Roseate PLATINUM, San Ramon, California
35 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is too short to be anything but happy.&quot;

Thanks so much!! I appreciate your support and your compliments; it's people like you that motivate me to continue writing poetry!

on Jun. 18 2014 at 1:55 am
Miss_Orange SILVER, Makati, Other
6 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m OK, I&#039;m Fine and I&#039;m alright are the greatest lies people tell each other everyday.&quot; By Me.

I will always find this beautiful, Rosie! I am glad the editor likes it too, I will spread this exceptional work!!!! rated it 5/5!