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Murder Around the Corner

October 25, 2021
By Ragineni_8 BRONZE, Cupertino, California
Ragineni_8 BRONZE, Cupertino, California
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A woman turned the corner. BANG! BANG!. She had witnessed something one should have never seen. A man dropped to the ground. THUD! At an agonizing pace, the man's shirt started to darken. Her eyes darted to the vile-hearted man who took off down the block. She could not process what she had just seen, for she was petrified. During this time, the man twitched and struggled like a poisoned rat. Without a moment's notice, he stopped. The woman's eyes started to shimmer. She produced a single drop rolling down her face. SPLAT! The tear had hit the pavement. SNAP! Reality hit like a freight train. Her first instinct was to sprint to the man. She checked his pulse. Nothing. Her tarnished hands, a reminder of a heinous act, unforgivable. Faint sirens blaring in her head. Before long they were at the scene. She felt a figure nudging her to stand up. In a blur, she was back home. Days passed, she felt nothing. Now, a shell of herself. She was tired. She had made up her mind. BANG! THUD! It was over. 


The author's comments:

In this set piece I tried to play around with writing an onomonopia. The mood was meant to be grim and the onomonopia comes with the thuds and the booms. The part I liked the most was writing when the man's shirt started to darken and the neighbors had heard a thud and a bang.


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