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The best kind of torture

November 15, 2015
By ThisEmilyDa1 SILVER, BF, New Mexico
ThisEmilyDa1 SILVER, BF, New Mexico
6 articles 0 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
only a life lived for others is a life worthwhile<br /> -Albert Instien<br /> the only person you should try to be better than is the person you were yesterday.


I still remember the fateful day...yesterday. The day it was ruined, broken, murdered. My brother, James, tried to grab it from my hands. 'You can't GRAB it from me!' I had told my little brother. These types of things have to be handled with care and delicacy. But he gave me no heed, he pulled and stretched and grabbed and bit. And now, its broken. My slinkey is broken.
          It used to be so perfect, so shiney. It used to be there for me. My consant companion, stress releif, toy. Its smooth edge and perfectly round shape was so soothing to my weary soul. Not a flaw anywhere. Not a care. With my slinkey, I was invincable. Unstoppable. Magnificent. But now it is flawed. Broken. Bent. It's useless. My poor slinkey, it deserved better than this.
          I tried to fix it, it's impossable. Nothing can fix a bent slinkey. The little slit in the side is consant. It's a consant reminder of the act of treasen commited by my brother. I tried to ignore the small flaw at first. But it was like trying to ignore uneven capris or uneven hoody strings. It eats away at you, nawing and your very well being. You know its there, lurking on the other side of the slinkey. You know it wants to hurt you, and it does, the moment you see it. I couldn't handle the pressure. I couldn't take it anymore. One does not simply ignore a bent slinkey.
          It couldnt be fixed. Nothing could be done. So I stopped trying.
          I hold it in my hands, it matches the round bruise perfectly. I cuddle its now shapless form. I caress its now rough and bent body. I lay on my bed, and remember the days we used to have together: just me and my slinkey. Froliking in the yard...or rather, the living room. Playing, and growing...together...forever. I remember rolling down the stairs with it. I remember the familiar thump, thump, thump as it wacked the wood on each step. And the satisfying tinkling sound it made as it moved. I remember the better days. Just me and my slinkey. The funnest torture device ever created


The author's comments:

I wrote this...uh, cause I was bored, actually. I wrote two versions and this is the one I liked better. The other version is posted in the thread titled pre read for read in the writers workshop. Anyway, I'd love any and all feed back or surest ions you could give me. Thanks!


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on Nov. 25 2015 at 12:54 pm
ThisEmilyDa1 SILVER, BF, New Mexico
6 articles 0 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
only a life lived for others is a life worthwhile<br /> -Albert Instien<br /> the only person you should try to be better than is the person you were yesterday.

Thank you so much for your comment! Titles are hard for me, do you have any better suggestions that might fit this story better?

MVReverie GOLD said...
on Nov. 24 2015 at 10:53 pm
MVReverie GOLD, Arlington, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
I can&#039;t drown my demons; they know how to swim.

This is quite interesting. I wasn't quite expecting this when I read the title. But it's still really good. I liked reading it. It really portrayed an image inside the readers head because of the attachment the character had towards the Slinky.

on Nov. 24 2015 at 12:48 pm
ThisEmilyDa1 SILVER, BF, New Mexico
6 articles 0 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
only a life lived for others is a life worthwhile<br /> -Albert Instien<br /> the only person you should try to be better than is the person you were yesterday.

Thank you for the comment, it means a lot.

riley_foxx said...
on Nov. 23 2015 at 10:03 am
riley_foxx,
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This is really good. Nice job!