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See Me, Save Me

August 27, 2011
By HateKnuckle SILVER, Peru, New York
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If you see me
It would only be
A smear on bloodstained window

If you were me
I would hope to be
A savior for a fee

Saving me
So lavishly
From the world that won't stop killing me

I hope we leave
In fashion bereaved
That would be for all eternity

Pray for me
In hope I might see
The gold around your face

So that your peace
Will not be brief
Or alone upon this reef

I hope to be
What you see
So to love you in my sleep

© Marie L., Sugar Land, TX

The author's comments:
You know that time in between awake and sleep where you are really drowsy and words just fall out of your head? Well this is one of those. Created out of thin air. I do believe I have had tried to write a similar one down on several occassions but this is the successful edition.
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Purpl3Bu773rfly GOLD said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 12:14 am
Purpl3Bu773rfly GOLD, Egg Harbor City, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I love the rain, its like the sky is crying so I don't have to." ~PurpleButterfly19

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Short, sweet, and simply amazing. I love this poem, very nicely done! <3 :D
sunshine7223 SILVER said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:43 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Afterall, a loose screw doesn&#039;t want to need, and a hammer doesn&#039;t want to be needed.&quot; -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely.&quot; -Me

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This is good. (: I really enjoyed it! I like the story you told, in so little words. Short poems are not my fortay, but you did a great job!
Piepiepie SILVER said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:42 pm
Piepiepie SILVER, Lakewood, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Be yourself. Everyone else is taken.<br /> ~Oscar Wilde

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This is really good. I love when you use 'peace' and 'brief' as a ryhme. 
reyess_anai BRONZE said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:42 pm
reyess_anai BRONZE, Corona, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Every deep thinker is more afraid of being understood than misunderstood.&quot; Nietzsche

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I find this very Unique and differnt... I LOVED IT!!
no.name. PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:35 pm
no.name. PLATINUM, Ceres, California
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I hate to agree. It was lovely.
Forgotmypassword said...
on Oct. 9 2011 at 9:57 pm
This is my favorite. Hands down this rocks
pooper said...
on Aug. 30 2011 at 9:09 pm
pooper, Plattsburgh, New York
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It may have been created out of thin air, but I really enjot the simplicity yet meaning in this one. I thinks its great even though you may think its not as good as some of your other work.