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My Assassination

January 6, 2012
By recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
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recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;These are the times that try men&#039;s souls.&quot; - Thomas Paine.<br /> <br /> &quot;You don&#039;t understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could&#039;ve been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am.&quot; - On the Water Front<br /> <br /> &quot;This is my place of failure.&quot;

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Life is a knife
Stuck in us all
The more we remove it
The farther we fall
Keep my hand on the handle
Just twist it a bit
Feel my lungs just tremble
Coughing Fit
My breath is a whisper
The pain is a scream
No one is listening
Don’t get what I mean
My legs were just shaking
I fall on my knees
All you people just stab me
A thousand bees
I plunge the knife deeper
Your raising the blade
Sunshine is fading
You welcome the shade
The blade swings
I dodge it, And fall
My death isn’t noticed
Uncared for by all

© Kandi B., Vacherie, LA

The author's comments:
This piece wasn't inspired by suicide but rather by stress. It's a bit deeper than it's face value I'd say because there's a decent amount of symbolism.. (I think that's the word..)
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HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 8:59 am
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can&#039;t pick sorry

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Another master piece my friend :) great work and it's like those people betrayed you and stabbed you but you dodge the knife and let yourself go instead
Rachielol said...
on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:54 pm
Rachielol, Bradenton, Florida
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
I dance like I live life, full out.<br /> <br /> Dance like there&#039;s nobody watching,<br /> Love like you&#039;ll never be hurt.<br /> Sing like there&#039;s nobody listening,<br /> And live like it&#039;s heaven on earth.

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What is your connection with bee metaphors? The peice is great but honey, maybe you could add in a whole lot more descriptive words if ur not only trying to rhyme. Also, don't say "just" so much. Really amazing work thp
Photographywonder PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 11:00 pm
Photographywonder PLATINUM, Unfortunetly, Texas
23 articles 10 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You can&#039;t wait for inspiration to come to you, you have to go at it with a club&quot;<br /> &quot;Can anything be sadder than work unfinished? Yes; work never begun&quot;<br /> &quot;Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes.Art is knowing which ones to keep&quot;-Scott Adams

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Im reading all your poems. This is great also! We should collaborate one day on a poem together :)
cookiestar said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 6:58 am
I love this:). I love the way u express ur emotions. This is an amazing poem, and beautifully written. Good Job!
the-air-unbidden BRONZE said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 5:56 pm
the-air-unbidden BRONZE, New Market, Maryland
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I love this. it shows that people ignore things that go on around them. comparing life with death. Wonderful!
chloena_garrett GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:54 am
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.<br /> <br /> Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.<br /> <br /> A poem is never finished, only abandoned.<br /> <br /> Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

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i love this. love u rr.
poetidea_myworld_22 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 6:46 am
poetidea_myworld_22 PLATINUM, Rediville, South Carolina
39 articles 1 photo 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A girl doesn&#039;t need anyone who doesn&#039;t need her&quot; Marylin Monroe

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loved it :)
Phoenix. said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 6:04 am
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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i really like it and the comparison you made!
.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:44 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

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( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡&deg;)

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Wow, I love it my fave, I like the rhyme, flow,emotions and the feelings...5/5 !
XxTickleM3EmoxX PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 4:31 pm
XxTickleM3EmoxX PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
22 articles 0 photos 31 comments

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L.Why is everyone O. trying to find it? V. Maybe it&#039;s hidden for a reason...E.<br /> <br /> If you look in the mirror and dont like what you see, you might find out first hand what its like to be me...

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... AMAZING! please keep writing... its now one of my favorites! :D
Shnitzal-Face SILVER said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 6:37 pm
Shnitzal-Face SILVER, Pflugerville, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you fail to prepare... prepare to fail

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Written with such emotion! It sounded as if it was written by Robert Frost himself, it just flowed so smoothly. I give it a six out of five :P.
lezziefarie GOLD said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 10:39 am
lezziefarie GOLD, Palestine, Texas
13 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
sometimes you get away with a mistake and other times life forces you to watch the one you love, love some one else......

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i like it... good flow 5/5
Frankieeee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 6:53 pm
Frankieeee BRONZE, Woodridge, Illinois
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I love it. this is amazing and very deep in emotion.
Fizza SILVER said...
on Jan. 11 2012 at 6:37 am
Fizza SILVER, Raipur, Other
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very good poem. I love the way u put the emotions in it. 5/5 stars. :)
hotshot PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:24 pm
hotshot PLATINUM, North Sioux City, South Dakota
27 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go confidently in the direction of your dreams. Live the life you have imagined.<br /> Henry David Thoreau

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this was very deep emotion for a poem to be made from. and all i got to say is you bought it, owned it, and sold it. terriffic
alligator6 SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:14 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn&#039;t kill you only makes you stronger.

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this poem is wonderful. i love the word choice. nice job!
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:49 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;It&#039;s better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> ~Luara Moncur

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I feel like i can so relate..painfullly beautiful!
browneyez16 GOLD said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:31 pm
browneyez16 GOLD, Hephzibah, Georgia
10 articles 1 photo 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You may fail, but fall still fighting, don&#039;t give up whatever you do. Eyes front, head high, to the finish...see it through&quot; <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> ~See It Through by Edgar Albert Guest~

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Wonderful rhyme scheme. I'm forever stressed so I really get this poem.
recurring_resilience SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:25 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;These are the times that try men&#039;s souls.&quot; - Thomas Paine.<br /> <br /> &quot;You don&#039;t understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could&#039;ve been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am.&quot; - On the Water Front<br /> <br /> &quot;This is my place of failure.&quot;

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It's funny how you say that about the forced part! When I was writing i was just trying to make it flow right; not rhyme! Anyway I hope you ditch the stress soon! :D
Acastillo GOLD said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:18 pm
Acastillo GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
11 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just because you have flaws, doesn&#039;t mean you aren&#039;t beautiful ~Zayn Malik

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Wow I really liked it, I'm under tons of stress right now so I can relate in a way. I liked that the rhymes didnt sound forced, nice job! :)