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Self Destructing

January 21, 2012
By Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
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Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
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"if you're not 1st you're last"

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I’m trapped in an open field
And I feel but it can’t be real
I’m lost within the found
As I sore to the ground

My darkest day have come and gone
The Devil’s demons have sung their song

And just because there’s not a knife through my throat
Or a bullet in my head
And though I’m still breathing
Doesn’t mean I’m not dead

Walking on the line between eternity and obis
In a land swallowed by madness
Lives and lives drowned in lies
My hopeless existence dragging by

A day-by-day war against thoughts
My living corpses begins to rot
With neighborhood gutters forever stained red
Cries for help in silent screams are that are said

The endless torment
That crashes against my lungs
Stealing my every breath
The pain has just begun

© Molly H., Lynden, WA

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AngelsLullaby GOLD said...
on May. 23 2012 at 1:27 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
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Wow this is magazine material! So powerful and alot of teens can relate to this feeling. Definately in my favorites. Your a fantastic writer.
SuNshiNe007 ELITE said...
on May. 16 2012 at 11:08 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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Wow! Amazing! I absolutely love this one! Keep up the amazing work! I love how you wrote this one!!:D
wordbeater SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2012 at 4:15 pm
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
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I enjoy your interesting rhyming patterns. The only advice I give you is to be careful of your spelling, because it can easily change the entire meaning of a poem. 
wordbeater SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2012 at 4:15 pm
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
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Truth is beauty and beauty truth, that is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know.<br /> <br /> Keats

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I enjoy your interesting rhyming patterns. The only advice I give you is to be careful of your spelling, because it can easily change the entire meaning of a poem. 
ibadancer13 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 11 2012 at 2:11 pm
ibadancer13 BRONZE, Urbandale, Iowa
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Wow this was incredible! I loved the line "I'm lost within the found"... it was extremely powerful:) I thought how you switched rhyming schemes was very unique and cool, but also a little confusing at times. Otherwise great work! I loved this!:)
ibadancer13 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 11 2012 at 2:11 pm
ibadancer13 BRONZE, Urbandale, Iowa
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Wow this was incredible! I loved the line "I'm lost within the found"... it was extremely powerful:) I thought how you switched rhyming schemes was very unique and cool, but also a little confusing at times. Otherwise great work! I loved this!:)
Aginger GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2012 at 10:51 pm
Aginger GOLD, Bingen, Washington
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This is very deep and emotional. Pain and struggle interally is portrayed well in this piece, nice job! I would love if you could read and give feedback on my poem "Forever." Thank you, and well done!
PhoenixCrossing GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2012 at 10:29 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This is a really strong and emotional piece and I love that. At first I didn't really like how you switched from rhyming pattern to rhyming pattern but I realized that is unique to you and I never would have thought of that ;] Great job! I'd suggest looking over your first stanza. That's the only one that didn't flow to me. Maybe choose a different one to start it. Otherwise, fantastic piece; keep writing!
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 17 2012 at 8:44 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
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&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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I agree, that was my favorite line. This is a beautifuly emotional piece, and I feel like it really captures the true essance of suffering.
austenite77 GOLD said...
on Feb. 16 2012 at 11:00 pm
austenite77 GOLD, Appleton, Wisconsin
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I agree with everyone else on their favorite stanza, I just like the flow. I wish the website didn't put it in such an odd format, but that's not your fault. I like how dark and sad this was
Kiki_McGee GOLD said...
on Feb. 15 2012 at 11:07 pm
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
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&quot;Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all.&quot; - Emily Dickinson

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I absolutely love the the line "... And though I'm still breathing/ Doesn't mean I'm not dead." Haunting. Besides a few punctuation errors this is a very well written and thoughtful poem.
iHannahJ GOLD said...
on Feb. 15 2012 at 7:12 pm
iHannahJ GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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I think that this poem is great and i loved your diction. The rhyme schyme was uinque, I though it was cool how you had rymes but not in a specific pattern. Keep writing!
SpringRayyn PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 14 2012 at 6:39 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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&quot;Don&#039;t punish yourself,&quot; she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing.&quot;<br /> --Markus Zusak, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

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I like the way you make it feel like drowning sort of (at least to me). There were a few grammatical errors, but not too many, so it wasn't so bad. I liked the stanza that said, "...not a knife through my throat...doesn't mean I'm not dead." Really good thought.
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 5:05 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
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well thanks so much you guys it means a lot to me =)
beautifulspirit PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:53 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

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I like this:) And I agree with JustAnotherOwl. The second stanza was my favorite part too. The idea of a "day-to-day war" was good too.
JustAnotherOwl SILVER said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:47 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Yeah...It didn't let me space those lines out...sorry!
JustAnotherOwl SILVER said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:46 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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&quot;See, we don&#039;t really care who you are;<br /> Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.<br /> So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer&#039;s disease,<br /> And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Sanctuary&quot;- Paradise Fears

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This was really great! I especially loved the lines, "And just because there's not a knife through my throat Or a bullet in my head And though I'm still breathing Doesn't mean I'm not dead" Besides that, I just really liked the entire piece as a whole. I though the word choice was brilliant! (: