May I just say that what I thought first anaphora was actually this obscure poetry form I thought was cool that I forgot about, but whose name starts with a T, and it gave me such joy to see it used here.  Where the second and fourth lines become the first and third in the next stanza. What I see often on this site is people coming out and just plainly saying how they feel but rhyming it, however here you've shifted away from that mentality and begun to demonstrate your emotion rather than state it baldly. It's short and direct, but it has a haunting methodicism in how it proceeds, and I'm almost glad that it ends with the first line, because I'd almost be afraid to go further. You did well in writing a poem that has influence on its reader