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The Pit

March 21, 2014
By JacobTheOrdinary PLATINUM, Rancho Cucamonga, California
JacobTheOrdinary PLATINUM, Rancho Cucamonga, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Fiction is the lie that tells the truth."


The pit.
The unforeseen,
never-ending,
bottomless,
dark,
empty,
pitch-black,
void.
This pit. I ask you to join me.
As I jump down
this pit,
this never-ending thing.
It’s because
I want to fall
with you
in love.
We can join together
and make this dark pit
full of
Radiant Love.



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on Apr. 9 2014 at 6:27 pm
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

I like how you constructed this poem. The irregular lines and bold punctuation really grabbed my attention. I found the poem's concept to be very interesting as well. Dark pits usually aren't associated with something pleasant like love. Five stars!