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Gravity

April 5, 2009
By MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.

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I wrote this to reflect self sabotage
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Oreozz SILVER said...
on May. 1 2012 at 5:29 pm
Oreozz SILVER, Palmer, Texas
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This has TRULY touched my heart!! It is beautiful and I can not say as to how this has touched me!!! It is like you took EXACTLY how I feel and put it in words!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!
mickeymouse said...
on May. 1 2012 at 2:31 pm
When I read your poem I liked how you used cliche in your writing to say that you are actually doing that. I also liked how you used figuative language to say that you were gravity.
NOLDEG BRONZE said...
on May. 1 2012 at 10:37 am
NOLDEG BRONZE, Waterford, Wisconsin
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This is a very good poem with personification.  I could relate to each of the verses which made it all the better.
why do u care said...
on May. 1 2012 at 8:12 am
I like the metaphor and hyperbole. I like the hyperboe the to let my dreams die in my arms.
CreativeAngel SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2012 at 6:22 pm
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I love the meaning of the poem and how deep it is. Just an awesome poem.
SwagGuy101 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 1:23 am
SwagGuy101 BRONZE, Millington, Tennessee
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This was great, very deep thinking.

Please look at mine and give me advice, anyone.

-Comment from a guy with swag

byebye said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 6:52 pm
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Simplistic yet so complex in meaning! Love it, great work.

Also, I haven't been getting much feedback on my work. Would love to have others check out my poems, "Butterflies" and "Falling" :)

MarissaWhitecloud SILVER said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 10:58 am
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Not sure what this means but its wonderful!
ellen22 GOLD said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 5:43 pm
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I think it's beautiful and deep. Good job!
chantelle.g said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 1:35 pm
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I've read every single one of your poems. You're very talented.
irishlass317 said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 6:51 am
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Oh my goodness I looooooooooove it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! very, very good!!!!!!!
Kayte BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 2011 at 4:34 pm
Kayte BRONZE, Sandy, Utah
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This is amazing!! Describes my life beautifully. Keep it up!

noname37014 said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 8:01 am
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This is a really nice poem! Subtle, but still understandable.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 3 2011 at 11:36 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Haha, thankee kindly :)
Mariah_0.0 SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 2:50 pm
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I liked it, it's a really good piece
Risible SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 8:27 am
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beautifully said IamtheshyStargirl, love the imagery 
poet aulakh said...
on Aug. 11 2011 at 9:10 pm
it is well described to hope and desperation
Ellimee said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 12:01 pm
If anyone says you're an OK writer, show them this piece and watch their eyes widen and jaws drop. This is awsum!
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 3:29 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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subatance = Substence.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 3:29 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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All of my words are gone today; there is poetry in my heart, but it does not translate well in the open air, the words are born transluscent white and empty, no subatance, no weight.

All I can think to say is 'Wow'. You have described Gravity's voice perfectly.