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The Last Pit

October 10, 2009
By xXxDarkDude7x BRONZE, Union, Missouri
xXxDarkDude7x BRONZE, Union, Missouri
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The kick over the cliff
lands me on my back.
The taste of blood
and deception,
a bad taste, in my
mouth.
Leave, I give you my back.
I build a wall, forever blocking
the way back.
Some say forgive
and forget,
some say forgive and
learn from the past; now
in this time i say just forget, no
forgiveness.
The justice is sweet,
although i don't know
if it has stung....
The justice is sweet.



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on Oct. 21 2009 at 10:29 am
writerscramp PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Anyone who says winning isn&#039;t everything,<br /> Has won nothing.<br /> ``Mia Hamm

wow. that is really good. The only thing i'd say is that while it is good to let a thought float off and let the reader come to their own conclusion, you need ot help a little more. a couple more lines could do that, nothing drastic, i like it!