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Doors

October 15, 2009
By oracle-of-nonsense PLATINUM, Winnabow, North Carolina
oracle-of-nonsense PLATINUM, Winnabow, North Carolina
37 articles 4 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;We are born with two incurable diseases -- life, from which we die; and hope, which says maybe death isn&rsquo;t the end.&quot;<br /> - Andrew Greeley


Press my fingertips
against the smeared, greasy glass,
watching the girl standing alone
in the monochrome metro.
There is something urgent about her,
something so deeply sad in those big eyes,
something trapped inside an everyday nightmare
where the monster is swallowing her whole
and her hands are tied.

She needs to get on this train.
She needs it more than anything,
but I'm the only one
with my nose to the window.
The rest exist
behind vacant stares.
Not their fault,
but I have to get her.

I rap my knuckles against scratched epitaphs
and one-line tales of love and humanity
and she looks up,
not caring who,
simply knowing that she needs to escape
into this cramped, smelly car
over-filled with the unconscious.

I worm my way to the doors,
push at them with both hands,
but they were not made
to be moved by the will of one.

We stand,
slender fingers to short ones through the transparent barrier,
and I want to tell her
that I won't let it leave without her,
but it's not a promise I can make alone:
The mindless dead
must first be resurrected
from the womb like children,
blind to the condemning sight.
Then the doors will be opened.

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Dedicated to L. Alice White

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on May. 8 2011 at 12:28 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

You're an amazing poet. :) I was reading your other work, and darn, you're good! XD

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on Apr. 18 2011 at 5:01 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

This poem, reminds me of the song

Don't stop believling by Journey


on Feb. 2 2010 at 5:32 pm
oracle-of-nonsense PLATINUM, Winnabow, North Carolina
37 articles 4 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;We are born with two incurable diseases -- life, from which we die; and hope, which says maybe death isn&rsquo;t the end.&quot;<br /> - Andrew Greeley

I have to say, that is probably one of my favourite lines as well. Thank you.

on Jan. 31 2010 at 10:22 am
the_Horsegirl SILVER, Minneapolis, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
People need dreams, there&#039;s as much nourishment in &#039;em as food. <br /> --Dorothy Gilman<br /> <br /> If there is such a thing as truth, it is as intricate and hidden as a crown of feathers.<br /> --Isaac Bashevis Singer

I really like the line "I rap my knuckles against scratched epitaphs and one-line tales of love and humanity". As a whole, I think you poem is good, but in some places, like the second paragraph, is a little "long-winded" and could do with some editing.