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Where?

January 28, 2010
By forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Fear will never overcome you, if your will to succeed is strong enough" From "The greatest salesman"


Where is a hand when I have fallen?
Where is a Light in my darkest moments? Where is a path when I am lost? Where is a shoulder I can lean on? Where is my mind when I want to use it? Where is my life when I want to live it? Where are my tears when I want to cry? Where is a teacher that will truly teach? Where is a loving family member in my time of need? Where is a true lover when my heart is truly broken?


The author's comments:
Was going through some rough times. lost wondering if ill ever be found. That is whta inspired this piece.

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on Feb. 22 2010 at 11:09 am
RainieLee BRONZE, Fremont, California
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You have conveyed all the misery in the world into 9 questions. ;)

But by using questions, you imply there is still hope.

Gorgeous.

And did I mention that the picture you chose just gave me chills when I read the poem? Awesome match.

on Feb. 12 2010 at 1:29 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I love this.

I can really relate.

Keep writing.

And please check out my work.

Comment and rate if you wish.

Thanks!

on Feb. 11 2010 at 1:51 pm
TheOnlyWritician GOLD, Clermont, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
We loved with a love that was more than love. -Edgar Allen Poe

I agree with everyone else but your questions are really heartfelt. Good job.

on Feb. 8 2010 at 4:37 pm
justsmile164 BRONZE, New York, New York
4 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Talent is nothing without character."

this was really good, but I agree with everyone else that it would be easier if you divided it into stanzas.

on Feb. 8 2010 at 2:23 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Stupid Is As Stupid Does.&quot; -Forest Gump (;<br /> &quot;No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude.&quot;

Very nice piece, and yeah i agree with the other post. It would be easier if you lined the stanzas under each other, that way itd be easier to read. But other than that it was very good. I'm sorry you went through a rough time. I know from experience, they suck.

on Feb. 8 2010 at 1:28 pm
have_a_heart GOLD, Jackson, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Parting is all we know of heaven and all we need of hell.

I really liked it. but itd be easier to read if you divided it into stanzas and lines. then it would have more of a distinct rhythm pattern and be easier to read.