You have some really great lines here, but I think you should work to make it more of a cohesive unit. What I like about a poem is when it describes one image that symbolizes something. (Just a personal preference, of course.) I would love to see a full-fledged poem dedicated entirely to the idea of running into the rain and not getting cold. Describing the emotions the speaker feels watching the icy rain, feeling torn -- and then running into the rain, and she doesn't feel the cold. Something like that.

Likewise with "but I forgot to call him beautiful." Maybe an entire poem forming this boy for the reader -- his beauty, his smile, his fingers, his skin. A poem that starts "I saw the boy with the dark hair / and the sad eyes" (I'm quite attached to that line) and give us more about him -- and then end off "but I forgot to call him / beautiful."

You have plenty of excellent lines for various poems. I feel like you should do them justice and give them the full poems they each deserve.

Thanks for the ratings and the comments, this one really was never supposed to be a poem, I actually had major writers block and just scribbled something down lol.

it caught me at the begging and made me keep reading, i like this and would like to read more. (maybe check out some of my stuff???) keep writing!

I totally love this...it strikes a note with me without being intrusive...

it's like looking at a three-leaf clover and knowing that it once had four leaves :)

This made me smile!