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My Eye's Reflection

July 7, 2010
By MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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Wiping the steamed mirror,
a reflection appears.
My haunting eyes stares back
Black pupils are deep with horror,
shallow with guilt.
There used to be something there
hope, will
I don't remember which
but now, i only see the end.

© Brian B., Highland Village, TX

The author's comments:
During my darker days, i was appalled at my own reflection and this was a way for me to try and understand what i saw.
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luckypachyderm SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 11:44 pm
luckypachyderm SILVER, Medford, Oregon
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Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius, and it is better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring- Marlyn Monroe

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so far, this one is my favorite. i love then ending especially. your very talented, its not easy to convey so much in such a short poem. well written
MelanieLouise PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 16 2010 at 9:30 am
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

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thank you. and i will check out yours too :)
Marlyre PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 15 2010 at 9:52 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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darker days come to everyone, and often an awesome poem follows... read some of mine?
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 6:19 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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i really like this!! good job! i have to say the other one was my fav. out of the two though!! you have alot of talent!! don't stop using it:)
MelanieLouise PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 11:01 am
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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thank you so much :)
through my eyes said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 5:07 pm
out of all your pieces i like this one, i like the emotion that it conveys, and its short and simple. great work :)
MelanieLouise PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 1:47 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

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thank you for your feedback. i knew it was a little off but i wanted someone like you to tell me what i needed to change :) ya know how it is when you look at something for a while and you can't anything wrong or right about it, well thats how it was with this piece. thanks again :)
thezebrasgray PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 11:32 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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being totally honest, i dont like it.  i sorry, i know that it sounds rude but, the flow isn't quite right.  i do like the message though
MelanieLouise PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 8:20 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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aww thank you !
MercedesXO DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:48 pm
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
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you did an amazing job with this:) i like the simplicity of it, and how it goes on to mean so much more. great job!