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War Room

July 14, 2010
By sky_is_womb BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
sky_is_womb BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
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All the soarings of my mind begin within my blood- Rilke


There is a secret war room
That nobody can see
It lies beneath the glitz and glam
Of today’s rough industry

Mannequins and models
Unnaturally complete
Group to form a silent army
They will not see defeat

Their target is the insecure
Their causalities will mount
They plot to conquer from within
Kill from the inside out

Today I looked into the mirror
My breath refused to come
I saw something from Halloween
And I knew the war was won



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on Nov. 26 2010 at 11:35 am
sky_is_womb BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
All the soarings of my mind begin within my blood- Rilke

Thank you so much, I am so happy that I was able to affect you so profoundly.

By the way your drawing Heartbeats may be the best piece of modern art I have ever seen. I think I've commented on it before, but again it truly exquisite, it belongs in a museum.


on Oct. 29 2010 at 7:06 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind.&quot;<br /> -Ghandi

Wow I really know what you mean.  I can see myself more accurately now, and know that I am not ugly and actually above average pretty, but magazine picutres, celeberties, models, and society's expectations caused me to feel very badly about myself for quite a while.  This is very meaningful.  you addressed the issure beautifully!

 


on Sep. 16 2010 at 4:34 pm
Damara...C GOLD, Mings Bight, Other
11 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Accept me for who I am, or, watch me as I go&quot;!

i really enjoyed this nice job. Excellent words and description..... is this actually how u feel????? =)

Origins BRONZE said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 10:20 pm
Origins BRONZE, Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you say you&#039;re going to do something, you better do it, otherwise nobody will take you seriously&quot; <br /> -Me

This was actually very nice. I enjoyed reading this. This is one of the few poems on this site that i have read that talk about life in a meaningful way, not about love and all that. If my interpretation is correct, then this poem has figurative and profound significance to life, which is what i try for in my poems. 

Check out my poems when they get posted... They relate to life like none other


KatB14 SILVER said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 2:52 pm
KatB14 SILVER, Chesapeake, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You don&#039;t always get the waterfall short-cut in Mario-Kart. That&#039;s life.&quot;-I.P.<br /> <br /> &quot;Doubt thou the stars are fire; Doubt that the sun doth move; Doubt truth to be a liar; But never doubt I love.&quot; -Hamlet

I really like how imaginative you got with it, describing it as a war and such. that was so interesting :)

Could you look at my "The Not-Quite a Love Poem" in the forums please?


on Aug. 18 2010 at 11:02 am
avantgarde GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
I write for the same reason I breathe...because if I didn&#039;t I would die. --Isaac Asimov

Wow, I love how it relates to todays society! It flows wonderfully and the rhyming is not cliche or lame, this is a truly unique piece! Well done!

on Aug. 18 2010 at 10:01 am
sky_is_womb BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
All the soarings of my mind begin within my blood- Rilke

thank you so much!

on Aug. 18 2010 at 8:17 am
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
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wow!  I really really love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! it flows so easily! I'm totally gonna mark it as a favorite!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the meaning and depth!