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mannequin

July 26, 2010
By lizzie625 SILVER, Monument, Colorado
lizzie625 SILVER, Monument, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
“When you're taught to love everyone, to love your enemies, then what value does that place on love?” -marilyn manson


fixed face, hollow shell.
are yo doing very well?
Expensive threads make clothing seams,
ripped out pages of waist-line dreams.
like a nylon wig,
like Barbie's hair
sits atop your head
and the people...stare.
harsh flourescents lights
heat the metal
inside your structure
like a hot tea kettle.
painted eyes
little pnk lies
love plastic men.
mannequin.


The author's comments:
thinking about a mall.

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on Sep. 14 2010 at 3:36 pm
lizzie625 SILVER, Monument, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
“When you're taught to love everyone, to love your enemies, then what value does that place on love?” -marilyn manson

hey, thanks for the feedback!

Aidyl BRONZE said...
on Sep. 14 2010 at 3:00 pm
Aidyl BRONZE, Oshawa, Other
4 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you want a friend be a friend.&quot;<br /> <br /> -Poster<br /> <br /> <br /> &quot;That&#039;s cool. Hey you know what&#039;s even cooler than triceratops? Every other dinosaur that ever existed!&quot;<br /> -Dwight Schrute The Office

I really liked the line, "Expensive threads make clothing seams, ripped out pages of waist line dreams."

I thought this was really cool. Only thing I would change is the ellipsis (...) before stare. It might just be me, but I feel like it upsets the flow.