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My Descent

March 12, 2011
By ninjadragon56 SILVER, Denver, Colorado
ninjadragon56 SILVER, Denver, Colorado
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Why won’t you listen?
What’s so wrong with me?
That no one will even give me a sideways glance
No one sees me
As I begin my descent
My descent into madness
Into the edges of what I can take
What it will take to bring me all the way down?
Down
Down
Down
Into the fringe of existence
Cast away and
Lost to the void of my empty spirit
Why won’t you listen?
Can I really be such a plague to your existence?
That I am treated like this by you
I hide it and
No one cares
No one sees me
No one knows I am descending
What will it take?



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on Jul. 9 2011 at 9:50 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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&quot;I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free.&quot; - Michelangelo<br /> &quot;I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am.&quot; - Sylvia Plath

Wow this is deep and touching...I really liked it... :) Check out my poem too...

on Apr. 18 2011 at 11:19 am
ninjadragon56 SILVER, Denver, Colorado
6 articles 4 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Private favorite personal quote, do not read, all violaters will be prosicuted.

i do have a NaNo! i have the same username on everywebsite, you see a ninjadragon56 its probably me! :P 

thanks, i would make the change on here but i don't think i can... eh-heh


on Apr. 16 2011 at 5:05 pm
lucybrown SILVER, Blacksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer&#039;s best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer <br /> <br /> First things first, but not necessarily in that order. ~ From Doctor Who

This is really good!  It has such a sad feel to it, and I like the words you used, they really helped contribute to the entire feel of the poem.  In the eighth line, however, it might read better if it said, “What will it take to bring me all the way down” 

Anyway, I really liked it.  :)  Do you have an account on Nanowrimo, by the way?  I think I recognize your username.