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Rabbit

May 12, 2011
By DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death


In General
he saw what made her
and how it closed around.

The walls extend
and the corners jutt
so she chooses a way

It’s Wrong,
but the oil-soaked wick
is ashes
so the reprocess begins

And the candle helps,
but in time
like everything
the wax covers her

Simplify to understand
and become ignorant to forget.

Lost.
Yet she won’t admit
save through liquid

He wants to
and occasionally
she lets him
sometimes

She,
he
know, but pretend
like a white rabbit under a grapevine

The General,
She saw what broke them.
straight and fast.



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on Aug. 18 2011 at 11:46 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Haha well that's ok! Thanks!

on Aug. 15 2011 at 9:24 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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I had to reread this to understand the message. I loved it! You're a talented writer.

on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:23 am
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Gracias!  

leafy said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 7:59 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

i love this poem, and i agree with hanging girl, the flow was good and the message was cool too. keep up the nice work!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 9:36 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Gracias!!!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 5:32 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend.&quot;

Woah. I love how deep it is and conveys a hidden message. I liked how it flowed too.