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Why? 2-25-2011

July 27, 2011
By EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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&quot;Be careful what you set your heart upon - for it will surely be yours.&#039;<br /> James A. Baldwin

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Why so tired?
Why so mad?
Why do I keep trying?
Why do I wish for what I can't have?

Why violets?
Why roses?
Neither of them mean anything.
Neither of them care.
Neither of them do anything.
They just sit there.

Why the same?
Why not different?
Why depressed?
Why not optimistic?

Why am I here?
Why are you there?
I don't know how to end this.
I guess it ends here.

© Leonora J., Fullerton, CA

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This is the very first poem I ever wrote. This was the start of it all.
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no.name. PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 5:08 pm
no.name. PLATINUM, Ceres, California
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I agree with IamtheshyStargirl
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 29 2011 at 5:59 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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This is a very good first poem, well done.
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 1:35 pm
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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Thanks for the critique. It was a bit forced because when I first started wiriting I thought that a poem sounded bad if it didn't rhyme. Unfortunately because of that the poem lost some of its integrity but I figured I would post it anyways to see what people thought. So thanks again for letting me know :)
MumblingMelanie DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:50 am
MumblingMelanie DIAMOND, Jackson, Missouri
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Seeing as it's your first poem, it's quite good.

The only thing I'd comment on negatively is that some of the rhymes seem a bit forced.

Other than that, I really like the meaning and the last two lines.