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Puck Farm

August 15, 2011
By BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.


Puck Farm, to you, may just be a place
To me it is where my Nana lives
Where my cousins, uncles, and aunts gather
And when I was younger,
Puck Farm was filled with magic and adventure
My cousins and I defeated dragons,
Captured forts
And fought in great water balloon wars
On Christmas Eve we would wait for Santa
To visit us in the night

Now that we are older
The dragons lay dormant
The forts are abandoned
And the water stopped splashing
With every year the magic is waiting
And I hold on,
To the magic of Puck Farm



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on Sep. 27 2011 at 8:55 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Thank you! that's what i was going for

on Sep. 15 2011 at 6:46 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

thanks im glad you liked it

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Sep. 6 2011 at 8:20 pm
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
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This reminds me a lot of Puff the Magic Dragon. This poem makes me wish I was young again so I could relive those kinds of experiences. Good job!

S. said...
on Sep. 5 2011 at 7:28 pm
Liked it it was showing how some things lose their magic as we grow older :) 5 stars

on Aug. 27 2011 at 5:15 pm
backyardheart BRONZE, Cape Coral, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I still can&#039;t get over the frustration, the guilt and empathy I have for everyone. There&#039;s good in all of us and I think I simply love people too much, so much that it makes me feel too sad.&quot;<br /> ---Kurt Cobain

Very lovely. It's a personal poem, yet can still speak to anyone who's ever had a sacred childhood place. The childhood magic versus the mature perspective on Puck Farm is a nice touch. Great work.

on Aug. 26 2011 at 8:27 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Everything will be ok in the end. If it&#039;s not okay, it&#039;s not the end.&quot;

I like this and I can relate to it a bit.

on Aug. 23 2011 at 11:43 pm
divingforreality GOLD, Fontana, California
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I love the short story feel to it.

on Aug. 23 2011 at 9:12 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Thanks! I really tried to capture the feeling of a perfect moment as a kid in this and how it changes as time goes on

on Aug. 23 2011 at 9:09 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Thanks Im glad you liked it

leafy said...
on Aug. 23 2011 at 6:35 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

i like this, and yeah, its a bit cute, but you can also feel something behind it too. the flow is also nice, keep up the good work!

on Aug. 23 2011 at 6:01 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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&quot;I have a life. I just choose to ignore it.&quot;<br /> -one of my friends

This was fun, and adorable. I liked the flow and message. Very cute, and yet I could feel the meaning behind it. Great job!

on Aug. 21 2011 at 11:18 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Thanks and thats what it felt like when I was there.

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:34 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Yeah. i completely see this being a prologue! I think that this is a wonderful poem! Glad i read it. :)

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:24 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

When I wrote this my grandmother was try to tell everyone why she wouldnt sell puck farm. When she read this she was over joyed to see that someone understood why.

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:19 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

When I first wrote this I was thinking about writing short stories about my time there and this be a prologue so that might be why I didn't add more. Thank a lot for your tips though and your review it means alot to me.

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:15 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This is really cute :) I understand what you mean by missing your childhood!

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:11 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

i really like how you are talking about your memories. i dunno, it just comes across with such emotion and has great realism to it. i agree that maybe you could expand it a bit. describe what you did some more, but the simplicity is also nice. so it is up to you if you get some inspiration on this and you want to add more or not. i also think you could add some commas at the end of the lines to seperate the things you did, it might help the flow. Overall, GREAT job!!!!! :)))

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:03 pm
fubbeguts BRONZE, Mission Hills, Kansas
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i think some figurative language in the beginning would have helped the beginning a lot. right now it feels like you're just stating what happened but if you add more imagery it could help a lot. what i mean by imagery is talking about how clear the water felt in the water balloons or how the sun felt on the back of your neck or the pride you felt when you captured that fort. hope this helped and could you read my poem? it's the only one i have on my profile.

on Aug. 19 2011 at 2:04 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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I think the beginning could've used a bit more flow, but overall it was good. I absolutely love the last verse!

This kind of reminds me of my poem "Forever Friends".
Good job(:


on Aug. 19 2011 at 11:43 am
Josie_Jo BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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Honestly, I have no criticism for this. :) I think that the flow of the poem is very nice. I can tell that this poem definitely holds a lot of emotions.

Great work! ;)