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If I could only

December 23, 2011
By LausDeo PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
LausDeo PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness."--William Wordsworth


If I could grasp the skies I would lay them with more stars;
If I could command the seas I would lessen the turbulent waves;
If I could sing I would tell the Earth how I love all living things;
If I could be a tree I would grow taller than the mountains;
If I could only like the sun shine,
my rays would stretch further.



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on Jan. 13 2012 at 8:49 pm
LausDeo PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness."--William Wordsworth

Thank you! I appreciate it.

mari.dupont said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:27 pm
This is powerful! I really like the juxtaposition of the one thing you probably actually can do, sing, in the middle of the other things which you physically can't do. To me it means that you feel limited by something within yourself, not just by the limitations of the physical world. But it doesn't feel despondent or negative. There is still a light and uplifting quality to the poem that suggests you will keep reaching--that it is worth it to find a way to sing that love, because the light inside you is even stronger than the sun's. I also really like the syntax, "if I could only like the sun shine" because it makes it feel original so you don't gloss over it like you might "shine like the sun". You stop and take it in a little more. The whole thing is inspiring!