Fools gold | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. Fools gold

Fools gold

March 19, 2012
By illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
More by this author
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
10 articles 0 photos 150 comments
View profile

It pains me like a knife in the heart
Stabbing me over and over
To hear the word “I love her”
My steady resolve is slowly falling apart
What I need is our relationship to restart
Or maybe I just need a proper closer
But my love for you burns stronger than ever
Has my image in your mind gone tart?
The girl with the warm brown eyes
Make my blue seem cold and cruel
But to believe a beautiful face makes you a complete fool
She is the girl that other women despise
Soon, you too, will be fed up with her lies
For she is fool’s gold, a non-valuable jewel.

© Liaz M., Vineland, NJ

Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Alone
By bitty09 SILVER
Claymont, Delaware
bitty09 SILVER, Claymont, Delaware
5 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Doll House Living
By sgrace SILVER
West Chester, Pennsylvania
sgrace SILVER, West Chester, Pennsylvania
5 articles 22 photos 18 comments
View profile
Poetry
Different
By sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM
West Jordan, Utah
sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM, West Jordan, Utah
31 articles 0 photos 3 comments
View profile
Poetry
The Top
By imperfection GOLD
Gilroy, California
imperfection GOLD, Gilroy, California
17 articles 9 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Dream as though you&#039;ll live forever, live as though you&#039;ll die today.&quot;<br /> ~James Dean (1931-1955), American Motion Picture Actor, symbol of rebellion

View profile
Poetry
Never The Same
By sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM
West Jordan, Utah
sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM, West Jordan, Utah
31 articles 0 photos 3 comments
View profile
Poetry
My New Beginning
By delaney95 GOLD
St. Charles, Missouri
delaney95 GOLD, St. Charles, Missouri
11 articles 5 photos 5 comments
View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 7 comments.

pandagirl312 GOLD said...
on Jun. 6 2012 at 10:55 am
pandagirl312 GOLD, Leawood, Kansas
19 articles 1 photo 91 comments
View profile
First saying that I did like this poem, I want to provide one thought of constructive criticism. Even though the poem is titled with the subject of the metaphor (fool's gold), the metaphor that really should be the bulk of the poem doesn't really become obvious until the last line. If you were to write something similar again, then I would suggest putting the last line higher in the poem, followed by the lines that explain the poem (lines 13-14 maybe). With that being said, nice job.
ELM522 DIAMOND said...
on May. 26 2012 at 8:11 pm
ELM522 DIAMOND, Selden, New York
79 articles 0 photos 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;All those other girls, well they&#039;re beautiful, but would they write a song for you?&quot;-&quot;Hey Stephen&quot; by Taylor Swift

View profile
This is a great poem!  I enjoyed the metaphor of the fool's gold.
illusions GOLD said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 2:33 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
10 articles 0 photos 150 comments
View profile

thank you

 

illusions GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2012 at 8:48 am
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
10 articles 0 photos 150 comments
View profile
Yes it does seem that sometimes guys just go for the eye candy. Unforchaly this was writtene about my best friend since forever.
Shahiro PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:12 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy.&quot; - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

View profile
Some girls really r like that, it's sick! U know I found out that the way people imitate girls' voices al sassy and such is actually a stereo type for all! Some girls at my school do just that. Sometimes I have to wonder if it's all guys that just go for the eyecandy. Of coarse I know it's not but it seems that way sometimes. Nice job
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 30 2012 at 12:23 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

View profile

Interesting :) Your flow is really good in this, though there was one ajective that made no sense to me; how does an image in someone's mind go 'tart'? 

I liked this, you express longing and heartbreak with a certainty for disaster really well :)

theexpendablechild said...
on Mar. 29 2012 at 8:42 pm
very nice poem someone i  know is in a position like this and i cna relate to where you are coming from