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Of her and I

March 25, 2012
By Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life&#039;s challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid.&quot; - Albert Einstein


The sun is camouflaged
behind the dark gloomy clouds
I walk among the dead
with their names carved in stone

One name jumps forth
stealing my gaze
My feet start to run
toward the granite stone grave

I kneel and bow my head
I put my hands
on her tomb
my bones turning to dark emerald
positive energy surging through my body

Memories swell up inside my mind
of her and I swimming in the pond
of her and I singing in the car
of her and I sitting by the fire

Tear swell up
and shine in my eyes
they fall upon the ground
disappearing under the ground
touch the coffin far below


The author's comments:
I wrote this around the sentence: "my bones turning to dark emerald", for my creative writing class.

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Cat521 SILVER said...
on Dec. 29 2013 at 1:14 pm
Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
6 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Think, before you speak. Know, before you react. Love, before you hate. There is far too much anger and hatred in the world for you to be the cause of anymore.&quot;

Real nice, especially because it comes off of a prompt. Typically that's something I (if not most people) struggle with because you have something that it has to include or it has to be about but you found a way for it to become your own. 

on Apr. 22 2012 at 6:17 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;if you&#039;re not 1st you&#039;re last&quot;

his is a beautiful obviously written by someone who is filled with care 

and what an interesting use of "my bones turning into dark ember" its very CCC


on Apr. 20 2012 at 7:38 am
maizyiscrazy GOLD, Washington, District Of Columbia
10 articles 53 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe in miracles. ~Audrey Hepburn

Wow! Amazing! I love your poem!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 18 2012 at 12:00 pm
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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i agree with HoldingFast. it is a very sad poem but wonderful imagery. :) great work and keep writing XD

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:09 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Very impressive~ I can picture the poem in my mind. My favorite line was probably: "my bones turning to dark emerald..." Great work!

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 9:33 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life&#039;s challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid.&quot; - Albert Einstein

Thanks, and it was basically to show the emotion of someone you lost that was very close to you

on Apr. 16 2012 at 4:04 pm
HoldingFast GOLD, Plano, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If I wasn&#039;t meant to fly, I wouldn&#039;t have these wings&quot;

this was amazing.... i dont really get how "turning to dark emerald" works with it though. it's a beautiful line n i read your little blurb so i know it was for a class but i would love to hear your thoughts on how that works? like what was the thought process for its meaning in this poem. I think its beautifully amazing though.

on Apr. 15 2012 at 7:12 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference.&quot;

Beautiful message with great imagery. (check out some of the fiction though) Overall good job