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Death's "Accident"

March 31, 2012
By snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."


Death had an “accident” the other day-
A broken neck.
He was walking home from work
On his lonely, little trail
Thoughts of war
Permeating from his ill-fated mind.
I watched in disgust
As the man who had taken my brother
With one shot to the chest
Arrogantly marched along.
Vengeance
The shallowest of qualities in a person
Is always,
Always overpowered by love.
So, I crept up behind him
And without hesitation,
Did the unthinkable;
I stuck out my leg
To trip him.
Instantly, he let out a holler that was answered by
A bird’s shriek of delight
As it watched its eradicator
Cry with anguish.
The chrysanthemums did a little dance
A sort of a pleased jig
While the wind whistled a fervent song
Through the skies of Jerusalem.
Even God let out a chuckle
As he watched the black-cloaked entity
Swivel around in pain.
Grinning like a sick child
I too watched as a yellow colored liquid
Slowly seeped from death’s neck.
His body, delimited by a whirl of mist
Gently rose to the heavens
Never to be seen again.
Since that very day,
I visit death’s cemetery and lay a flower
For every time I wished he were here.
I’m now at 1,001 flowers,
But not one step closer to getting my wish,
My unattainable wish
Of death.


The author's comments:
I was inspired to personify death in a new and intriguing way as oppose to the classic stereotype where is death is portrayed as monstrous.

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on May. 25 2012 at 4:05 pm
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
16 articles 16 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

Yes! AMAZING! I absolutely loved the ending! And the thought that Death can die is just brilliant!   

on Apr. 19 2012 at 7:21 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I live for the nights I can&#039;t remember with the people I will never forget.&quot; -Carassisa M-&lt;3<br /> <br /> &quot;What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve.&quot; -Softball Coach Steve B-

This is wonderful! Great Job!

 

Have a question tho, you said that 2 parts of my poem "Chains" didn't quite match the quality of the rest, but only listed one. What was the other? Thanks for the feedback!


Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2012 at 9:37 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life&#039;s challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid.&quot; - Albert Einstein

Very great poem with great use of vocabulary

niner PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 15 2012 at 4:18 am
niner PLATINUM, Hartville, Ohio
32 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Isn&#039;t it funny how you broke my heart, but I still love you with all the pieces?&quot;<br /> &quot;It&#039;s easy to stand in a crowd, but it takes courage to stand alone&quot;<br /> &quot;What would you attempt if you knew you could never fail?&quot;

what a unique piece...very well written :)

on Apr. 14 2012 at 9:36 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

It was like reading a work of Edgar Allen Poe with a twist---the poem has a dark edge to it and Poe uses death as a common theme in his work. The way the speaker kills death is something I wasn't expecting in this piece.

on Apr. 14 2012 at 9:36 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

It was like reading a work of Edgar Allen Poe with a twist---the poem has a dark edge to it and Poe uses death as a common theme in his work. The way the speaker kills death is something I wasn't expecting in this piece.

on Apr. 13 2012 at 7:39 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;if you&#039;re not 1st you&#039;re last&quot;

this is really cool what you've got here. i love your ending and how you personified death 

on Apr. 13 2012 at 11:13 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Anytime!;)

on Apr. 13 2012 at 8:57 am
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference.&quot;

thanks alot!!!!

on Apr. 13 2012 at 8:51 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

You are a very talented writer, great job! I give you a 5 stars  for this!:) I love it!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 12 2012 at 2:58 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! beautiful poem. i could actually picture everything! nice ending. the poem has a choppy flow (=P) to it which suits it perfectly.great work and keep writing! XD

on Apr. 11 2012 at 10:40 pm
Simply_Ciara GOLD, Hopkinsville, Kentucky
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I love your use of imagery I could see everything in my mind while reading it it's Also very deep.