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Ashes, Ashes,... I Fall Down

April 16, 2012
By Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Ashes, Ashes… I fall down- written by Amber Diaz

My soul,
one that use to be pure,
now has
been filled with such hatred
that my heart weighs me down.

Thee has weighed me down
with their
painful words that strike my heart.

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

I fall down crying…
I know people’s
words & opinions
do not matter,
but if it is people
you see everyday… it hurts.

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

You people ruin life.
You people have ruined a life.
Thee, you all have ruined my life.




You all have weighed me down,
weighed my down
to the chasm of death!

I once had a pure soul…

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

I wish I did fall
to my death.

Ashes, Ashes… I fall down.

© Asia B., Hudson, MA

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This poem is part of a book of poems that i am writing called Number 1 UNwanted.
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Under-the-Rain GOLD said...
on Jun. 29 2012 at 1:15 am
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

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Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)<br /> Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

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thank you!  lol finially 14 lol

hey keep an eye out for my book (notice that i said book, not novel. book= nonfiction) i think i am going to call it Not a Tragedy

DJNATE said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 2:20 pm
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hay amber how are u this is nate iv read the poems u put on recently and they are very cool keep it up
DJNATE said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 2:20 pm
DJNATE, Chicago, Illinois
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hay amber how are u this is nate iv read the poems u put on recently and they are very cool keep it up
InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 22 2012 at 7:13 pm
I like the ending. The chasm of death line was very poetic, dramatic, and powerful! Thanks for adding the explanation point; it adds meaning. I like the reoccuring Ashes, ashes, I fall down, but you might consider structuring the rest of the poem more. It isn't clear who Thee is here. I like using Thee, just clarify who that is. Also, painful words that strike this heart gives more emphasis than my heart (as just a sidenote revision). Anyway, overall this is great work. Powerful, passionate writing. :)
vlad-hyde SILVER said...
on Jun. 18 2012 at 10:26 am
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Cant wait till the book comes out
JustPaperAndPencil BRONZE said...
on May. 2 2012 at 6:45 pm
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This is really good! I can feel the emotion you put into this! Great job! (:
poetidea_myworld_22 PLATINUM said...
on May. 2 2012 at 7:58 am
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I love it... i can feel ur emotion:) its very deep and beautiful :)
DanielM. said...
on May. 1 2012 at 9:55 pm
Awesome Job!!! that was really good. I enjoyed your title. Very deep poem
DJNATE said...
on May. 1 2012 at 5:03 pm
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this poem is a very deep poem and i love reading it. 

from; Nathon Shipman

InfinityandBeyond01 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 26 2012 at 10:29 pm
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The title caputre me. I'm going to be honset I wanted more. More of what you may ask and to tell you the truth I dont know. But I do like the idea alot and you make me want to read the book . So kudos to you ! Keep writing , Never give up!