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April 12, 2012
By IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

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My spine stiffens,
My hair rises,
My body shivers,
As the monsters embrace me,
Trapping me in arms
That feel as cold as winter.

I tried to pulled myself away,
But invisible fingers
Closed around my limbs
And dragged me down the abyss,
Into that terrifyingly inescapable,
And endless darkness.

© Julie S., Marblehead, MA

The author's comments:
It's about something I fear about, a thought that just comes into my mind to scare and no matter how much I try to get it out of my mind, it wins.
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Savyyy SILVER said...
on Sep. 8 2020 at 6:25 pm
Savyyy SILVER, Independance, Missouri
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I like it I thought it was good but I thought it needed a little more to it cause I couldn't stop reading it till the end and I loved it a lot you did an amazing job
Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 3 2013 at 2:55 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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I like this. A couple of things. I hate to sound all picky. Just that I wish you would develop the thought more. Like what is this fear. Maybe you don't have to be upfront about it. But like with your metaphors and imagery you could like imply it. Just a thought. Also I noticed that the verb tense changed from the first stanza then to the next. I know that makes me sound like a b*tch or a snob or both.But just thought I'd point it out. Otherwise, I think it's fantastic. It has an eerie feel to it. Like what is this thing. It has the reader on the edge of his/her seat wondering what can this thing be. Well done. 
HeatherOlivia GOLD said...
on Jun. 25 2012 at 2:00 pm
HeatherOlivia GOLD, Solothurn, Other
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This is written so well. It's so to the point and gripping, like a thriller novel that you just can't put down.
teamo14 BRONZE said...
on May. 12 2012 at 11:31 am
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really interesting. :)
InfinityandBeyond01 BRONZE said...
on May. 10 2012 at 10:10 pm
InfinityandBeyond01 BRONZE, N/a, California
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Pretty good! You made your fear into beautiful written words! I don't mean to advertise but can you check my work out too? Thanks!
snowleopard100 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 30 2012 at 6:33 am
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I didn't quite understand the poem by the side note cleared it up. In saying that, I love your inspiration for this poem and the use of line breaks to augment the strength of it.
TheCapturedBat GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2012 at 9:08 am
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
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this is so immediate and intense it is hard to read. it is so beautifully written.