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Unknowingly

August 9, 2012
By JesusFanatic BRONZE, Rush, Colorado
JesusFanatic BRONZE, Rush, Colorado
2 articles 1 photo 9 comments

I'M way over you
This is exacxly what you do
you can't prevent it
You can't deny it
Although you try, but you have to be yourself
And sometimes, I end up being the one on the shelf
Yes, I know I'm not the center of your universe
And for me it often times feels like a curse
You are being yourself, I'm trying to be me
I'm trying to flee and to be free
but you hold my heart unknowingly

I become more and more confused,
trying to hide the truth
It is an evident secret to everyone but you
and thank goodness, you would'nt find the proof
I pretend to be fell of hate
But, its love and it's slowly opening my metal gait
I tell myself your done, you've ruined it
But so suddenly, I'll fall, trip, slip
I start to speak to you
with a friendship type of voice
But you are exactly where my heart points
I love you, tenderly
but you, hold my heart; unknowingly

How can i prevent this?
I fight this raging battle but I know I'm going to miss
You can't control yourself;
displaying your own character
You don't know me, you harly notice me...
but you are my cure
So what do I do?
I'll continue to long for you
I'll remain to be in chains
And endure all these pains
Because I want you earnestly
And you, hold my heart...unknowingly.


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece to represent a situation that I have previously gone through. I loved writing this because it represented how I felt to the fullest extent. I look at it now and I am satisfied with the job I did and I love being able to remember how my life was at that point in time through the poetry that I wrote.

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on Sep. 1 2012 at 11:42 am
JesusFanatic BRONZE, Rush, Colorado
2 articles 1 photo 9 comments
Thank you so much. i appreciate it. I loved writing this poem... lots of fun!!!!!

DanielM SILVER said...
on Aug. 12 2012 at 10:04 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 245 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn&#039;t do.&quot; - Daniel Moto<br /> &quot; I&#039;ve sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?&quot;- Daniel Mathia <br /> <br /> &quot;People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person.&quot;-Daniel Mathia <br /> <br /> &ldquo;Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?&rdquo; &ndash; Daniel Mathia <br /> <br /> &ldquo;If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.&rdquo; &ndash; B. Reith

Great job!!!! I really like your message. I like your emotion

on Aug. 11 2012 at 11:03 pm
JesusFanatic BRONZE, Rush, Colorado
2 articles 1 photo 9 comments
Thank you very much! I appreciate your feedback, nd I really love using repetition because I feel like it brings out the truly important parts of the poem. Thanks!

on Aug. 11 2012 at 10:59 pm
AcidRoses SILVER, Elmont, New York
8 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Many that live deserve death and some that have died deserve life, can you give that to them? Do not be to hasty to deal out death and judgement, even the very wise cannot see all ends.&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> &quot;Can&#039;t get no more free randy!&quot;

Wow, great job. The last line at the end of each stanza was brilliant, "and you hold my heart, unknowingly." I love how the narrarator struggles with the prospect of being in love with this person even though he can't escape it. Great work.