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The Deck is Where I Go

March 4, 2013
By capsgirl74 GOLD, ..., Maryland
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&quot;Even the superstars need to be coached once in a while.&quot; -Adam Oates<br /> &quot;I work to make shots, I try to do something, always do something.&quot; -Alex Ovechkin<br /> &quot;You miss 100% of the shots you don&#039;t take.&quot; -Wayne Gretzy<br /> &quot;I want crazy.&quot; -Hunter Hayes

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The deck is where I go
To see the setting sun,
To watch the blazing ball of fire
Diminish into the dust.

It descends from Heaven,
Gently lowering to the Earth’s surface.
Pink, blue, orange, yellow, red.

A harmony of colors blending into
The cloudless sky.

Beauty at its finest,
A warm serenity,
A calmness settling,
A feeling of absolute peace.

Sunsets,
A wonderful sight.
So beautiful on this
Warm summer night.

© Katy B., Challis, ID

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capsgirl74 GOLD said...
on Mar. 25 2013 at 1:49 pm
capsgirl74 GOLD, ..., Maryland
11 articles 2 photos 5 comments

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&quot;Even the superstars need to be coached once in a while.&quot; -Adam Oates<br /> &quot;I work to make shots, I try to do something, always do something.&quot; -Alex Ovechkin<br /> &quot;You miss 100% of the shots you don&#039;t take.&quot; -Wayne Gretzy<br /> &quot;I want crazy.&quot; -Hunter Hayes

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thank you for your comments. i'll work on that 
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 25 2013 at 1:43 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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Very good details and imagery! but I must admit that you choose a very cliche topic for freeverse poetry. also your poem did not really flow well. It's hard to understand when you do not have a rythm. Remebr! Just because something is "free verse" doe snot mean that it is "prose". I can see you have talent though! keep writing!! Your still will always get better. Always just reread your poem to make sure that it sounds nice and someone would be able to identitfy it as poetry if it was read out loud to them. 
DoubttheCircles SILVER said...
on Mar. 25 2013 at 12:24 pm
DoubttheCircles SILVER, Washougal, Washington
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LOVE it!(: I like the way you use your words and detail to capture your feelings for the sun. Sunsets and sunrises are amazing and so beautiful and the reader really feels it when reading this. Good job!(: