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March 1, 2013
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Musical chaos
Fills the air.
The crunch of strings
Echo loud,
Desperate beauty
In distorted unison
With the crash of drums.
Ears ring with the silence
In between the lines,
In between the notes,
In between life and death.
We exist
Like a song
Beginning to end.
We rise and fall
Like the pulse of hymns.
But this song rolls on
And on,
And on,
Seeming to last forever
Just like our lives
In musical procession.

© Kimberly C., Houston, TX

The author's comments:
Inspired by my dad's ideas about how life goes on and on but ends eventually, like a song.
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hwoodruff98 said...
on Apr. 9 2017 at 10:42 pm
hwoodruff98, Lititz, Pennsylvania
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"In a gentle way, you can shake the world." -Mahatma Gandhi<br /> <br /> "What will your verse be?" -Dead Poets Society <br /> <br /> "Write drunk, edit sober." -Ernest Hemingway

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Great poem! The comparisons were spot-on, and your words were chosen very meticulously. The only thing I can think to say it that the use of the word "crunch" to describe strings doesn't exactly fit right. Perhaps you could say the "hum" or "reverberation of the strings?" I was also sent to ask you a question (by @SpeakerofWolves). In regards to the pieces of yours that have been published, about how long did it take after they were posted on the TI website for TI to tell you they were being published in the print magazine? Furthermore, are you able to publish them elsewhere?
midnightwoah said...
on Aug. 5 2014 at 6:53 pm
midnightwoah, Monett, Missouri
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&quot;We accept the love we think we deserve.&quot; -Stephen Chbosky

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Sweet similies, and how you gave the writing credit to your dad. Our lives are like a song that keeps on playing, between everything! 
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 15 2013 at 1:45 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
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&quot;There are none so blind as those who refuse to see&quot;

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it's the truth!!! And you thought I was better then you. You're crazy hahaha
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 14 2013 at 7:50 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Thanks a ton! :P
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 13 2013 at 10:21 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
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&quot;There are none so blind as those who refuse to see&quot;

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You are seriously amazing!!!!
romanticpoet GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 11:13 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
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wow!!!! its one of great poems i read
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:24 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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You should be famous by now but i lvoe the flow and it almost feels lieka  song i could sing it and still love it even with my horrible singing voice
monkeymorgan BRONZE said...
on Mar. 21 2013 at 5:32 pm
monkeymorgan BRONZE, Middlebury, Indiana
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&quot;Fair means that everybody gets what they need and the only way to get what you need is to make that happen yourself.&quot; Rick Riordan

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very  nice I like the rythem of the poem :)
Alex_Writer GOLD said...
on Mar. 21 2013 at 9:36 am
Alex_Writer GOLD, West Palm Beach, Florida
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&quot;In the long run, we shape our lives, and we shape ourselves. The process never ends until we die. And the choices we make are ultimately our own responsibility.&quot; ~Eleanor Roosevelt

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When I was reading this, I could picture the music running through my head.  Wonderful job! :)
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 7:32 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Thank u so much, everyone! :)
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 7:31 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Just pick a chat room and type what u want and hit enter :)
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 7:31 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Sure no problem :)
Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 5:01 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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Very engrossing. The beginning is somewhat like the beginning of The Iliad. The beginning is very beautiful. The imagery is alive with euphony, as well as, cacophony.
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 10:54 am
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

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Hannah i live this evryday it seems like......... Question can you tell everyone that i cant talk on here unless i go to the library..... idk when i will get to the library ........  the school blocked chat and email.......... ill try to talk soon.
moniekitty said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 8:31 pm
moniekitty, Henrico, Virginia
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all work and no play

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im new and i dont know how to use the chat. there no send button so what am i suppose to do help please
Lonely_Despair said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:30 pm
A very interesting piece. i enjoyed reading it. i hope to hear more. i believe you will be one to use great analogies in the future
Armyj13 SILVER said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:03 pm
Armyj13 SILVER, Traskwood, Arkansas
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The only easy day; was yesterday.

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I love music. It seems to be the only real get away from life that I have now. This poem was great keep up the good work!
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Mar. 18 2013 at 7:53 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

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great job keeep it up