The path | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. The path

The path

April 13, 2013
By -Hopeless- GOLD, Hudson, Indiana
More by this author
-Hopeless- GOLD, Hudson, Indiana
16 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The lines that have no rhyme, are the ones that mean the most&quot; -Me-<br /> <br /> &quot;Are you with me, or will you fall to your knees?&quot; - We came as romans-

View profile

A road,
Long and narrow.
A small light is all that showed.
The only thing heard is the song of a sparrow.
I feel the gravel beneath my feet,
I wish a better path was shown,
I can't believe I accepted defeat,
Now I walk this road alone.
Nothing but the company of a bird,
I walk as I cry and scream,
My voice cannot be heard,
Is the road just a dream?
I can feel reality slip away,
My mind fuzzy, my body weak.
My heart has went a stray,
Answers are now what I seek.
-Hopeless-

© Shanon G., Elgin, SC

Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Brother
By Anonymous
Poetry
Never The Same
By sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM
West Jordan, Utah
sHaDoWnInJa PLATINUM, West Jordan, Utah
31 articles 0 photos 3 comments
View profile
Poetry
The Protectors' of the World
By Arbys GOLD
Dobbs Ferry, New York
Arbys GOLD, Dobbs Ferry, New York
15 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;Edgar Allan Poe<br /> &quot;A dream doesn&#039;t become reality through magic; it takes sweat, determination and hard work. ~Colin Powell&quot; ~ Colin Powell<br /> &quot;Wisdom is not finally tested in the schools, Wisdom <br /> &quot;A poem is never finished, only abandoned.&quot;-Paul Valery

View profile
Poetry
Motley Crue: I really hear you
By Arbys GOLD
Dobbs Ferry, New York
Arbys GOLD, Dobbs Ferry, New York
15 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot;Edgar Allan Poe<br /> &quot;A dream doesn&#039;t become reality through magic; it takes sweat, determination and hard work. ~Colin Powell&quot; ~ Colin Powell<br /> &quot;Wisdom is not finally tested in the schools, Wisdom <br /> &quot;A poem is never finished, only abandoned.&quot;-Paul Valery

View profile
Poetry
'' FLY ''
By MONKEE426 GOLD
Minnesota, Minnesota
MONKEE426 GOLD, Minnesota, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 0 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live--So Live It To The Fuller

View profile
Poetry
I want a guy...
By grlgotgame BRONZE
Chillicothe, Ohio
grlgotgame BRONZE, Chillicothe, Ohio
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Girls with butts like mine, don&#039;t talk to boys with faces like yours.&quot;

View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 2 comments.

-Hopeless- GOLD said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 3:45 pm
-Hopeless- GOLD, Hudson, Indiana
16 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The lines that have no rhyme, are the ones that mean the most&quot; -Me-<br /> <br /> &quot;Are you with me, or will you fall to your knees?&quot; - We came as romans-

View profile
Omg your comments just make my day, thank you soo  soo much! I am glad you love my writing so much! It means a lot that you are taking the time to read my work, thank you, thank you, thank you (:
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 16 2013 at 6:05 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

View profile
I love this! I thought that the set-up was very unique and easy to follow. I like the title because it sets up suspense for the reader, you don't know what route the poem is going to go, you get an idea, but not the whole concept. I loved the fourth line, it was sad but made me feel calm. I like how you put that you wished a better path would be shown, that's life isn't it? It's foggy and you wish it were more clear. That moment of dissapoinment in yourself when you say you've accepted defeat, I felt the emotion really well. I love the ending.. so mysterious! GREAT job!