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Can't Breathe

April 16, 2013
By AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
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AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

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"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

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ripped from my lungs,
there goes my breath.
torn from my body,
here lies my heart.
i cannot breathe,
i cannot beat.
without air to cleanse my soul
i feel boggy.
weighed down by the past
and bad decisions.
with every breath i breathe
i cleanse my soul,
with every breath i dont
i lose my goals.
without a beat to my heart
sweet blood doesnt rush.
to my cheeks to my hands,
to my rounded ears.
nothing has meaning,
and meaning means nothing.
for my heart cannot beat,
and my lungs not inhale.
im stuck with only
my body and entrails.
my breath and my beat,
my two driving forces.
without them as supports
what is the purpose?
i cant beat
i cant breathe
and i cant seem to care...

© Lindsey D., Marblehead, MA

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AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on May. 9 2013 at 11:08 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

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thanks so much!!! that really means a lot because this is my fav of mine so im glad that you like it too!!
Jade.I.Am ELITE said...
on May. 9 2013 at 10:54 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

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Wow. I wish I had words to express how much I love this.........amazing!
AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 20 2013 at 12:24 am
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

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&quot;There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are.&quot; ~Ernst Haas

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thanks i appreciate it. 
_betweenthelines_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 11:07 pm
_betweenthelines_ BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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&quot;All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream.&quot;- Edgar Allan Poe

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Nice work! :)
AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 10:37 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
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ok thanks :)
LiraDaeris PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 10:35 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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The ending is great, but it starts picking up about halfway through. Fix up the rhythm in the top half, and this will go from good to great :)
AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:56 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
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&quot;There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are.&quot; ~Ernst Haas

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thanks :) i try but im not sure if im that good. thanks for reassuring me that im decent :D
Potterhead_Is_amazing GOLD said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:54 pm
Potterhead_Is_amazing GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
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Wow.I cant think of anything to say except....that was amazing I can't think of anything else to say!Keep writing,that was great!!!!
AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:02 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
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&quot;There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are.&quot; ~Ernst Haas

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haha thanks :) i think...
TheNamesBond....JamesBond BRONZE said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:41 pm
TheNamesBond....JamesBond BRONZE, Galloway, New Jersey
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It's absolutely terrible. Keep up the good work, It's GOOD
AmorMoritur PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:16 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
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&quot;There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are.&quot; ~Ernst Haas

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haha thank you :) i think this is one of my personal favorites. i think i right better when im mad or upset. happy poems just dont sound good :)
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 7:25 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
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Um what were you saying about not being good??? You are soooooo good....just...amazing. I absolutely LOVE it!!! Good job bestie :)