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The Actual Me

August 22, 2013
By TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames." -Miranda Lambert


I’ve made mistakes,
But it’ll be okay.
Cause it’s not just me,
We’ve all got them.

No longer will I
Be ashamed for being me.
It’s all behind me now.

The walls I’ve built
Can topple over.
The lies I’ve told
Can wash away.

I don’t want to be fake
Or try to fit in.
I want the actual me
To be what people see.

The sorrow and shame
I’ve felt for who I am
Don’t define me,
Not anymore.


The author's comments:
I wrote this poem because of real life experiences I've had in the past. I wrote it so that I could take a stand and say that I can't be anything but myself.

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on Nov. 3 2013 at 1:34 am
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames." -Miranda Lambert

Yeah, this is one of my poems that is more driven by the emotional state I was in. After your comments I'll definitely look at it and try to edit it more to fit what standards I want my poems to be up to.

on Nov. 2 2013 at 10:34 am
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I like the overall meaning of this, but (especially after reading your other work) I feel like it could have been executed better. To me, this reads like something that was written in a bit of a haste, probably because you were very emotional at the time. I think it's a great rough draft, but a little bit of editing could help it come across even better to the reader. Mainly, I would recommend looking at it from a more stylistic perspective. Good work though. :) Keep writing!

on Sep. 1 2013 at 8:48 pm
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames." -Miranda Lambert

Thanks for the critique! I'll have to think about everything youve said. :)

on Sep. 1 2013 at 9:48 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

I like the idea, for sure, and it was very well thought out, I can tell.....I just thought there might be something missing. But that's my opinion, and the poem is still lovely. It just doesn't seem to have the right flow/rhythm to it, but maybe that's just cuz I like more stylized poems. Great job, keep it up :)

on Aug. 31 2013 at 12:11 am
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames.&quot; -Miranda Lambert

Mckay, I'm glad you were moved by my poem. Thanks!!!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 30 2013 at 5:48 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I LOVE IT! It's about time people start standing up for themselves and be proud of who they really are. I don't want to live anymore in a world where we fear of being who we are. This is genuine and relatable. I know many people right now want to stand up for themselves and be proud of who they are. It's time. 

on Aug. 29 2013 at 11:12 pm
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames.&quot; -Miranda Lambert

Also, thanks for calling it inspirational. That one word means a lot when descrbing my work. I aim to try and give a message and help people learn from my mistakes. :)

on Aug. 29 2013 at 11:11 pm
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames.&quot; -Miranda Lambert

I'll really take that into consideration next time I edit it. I do understand what you mean by that. The amount in there can be a little much. I just haven't figured out how to do it with a little less, haha. Thanks!

Netnel GOLD said...
on Aug. 29 2013 at 11:08 pm
Netnel GOLD, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
17 articles 1 photo 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything that is done in the world is done by hope.

It is a nice poem bringing out honesty and truly accepting oneself. In one word it was inspirational. Simply to make the message universal I digger taking out one or two "I"s or "me"s but it is still very nice