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The Noises of the Night - Twisted Version

September 3, 2013
By hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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I put my hands up to my ears,
And shut my eyes.
I think of happy things,
While silently I cry.

Behind my lids I see,
Behind my hands I hear.
Inside my heart I feel,
All the noises pressing near.

Their words, they dance around me,
A soft sound on the wind.
The seeds of doubt have been embedded,
And are tearing at my skin.

I fight it back for long,
But not every battle can be won.
Soon I just lay down.
I give up. I am done.

The sadness fights its way,
Up to my very soul.
Until I become an empty shell,
Emotionless and dull.

I have my battle scars,
And I have my battle wounds.
Sometimes I'd like to think,
That it will be over soon.

With every noise that's said,
A piece of me will die.
I'll lie down in surrender,
And slowly close my eyes.

© Jami U., W. Hempstead, NY

The author's comments:
What really inspired this piece was mostly things I have heard about online and in daily life. About bullying, giving up, depression, cutting, suicide, things like that. All of this is so common now.
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hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 10:59 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you. It was supposed to be a sad ending. Sad endings are the most powerful. Happy endings are to... predicted.
Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 6:28 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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I love that ending. Everything seems perfect. Until that sad ending. Powerful. 
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 5:55 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thanks Roses!!
DarknessHasFallen GOLD said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 5:41 pm
DarknessHasFallen GOLD, Broomfield, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;m fine. I just feel like I&#039;m shattered into hundred of little shards of glass and I&#039;m going to hurt everybody who loves me.

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i love it!!!! nikki you are great
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 4:58 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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That means so much to me! Thank you a lot Blotted!! <33333
ChasingForever said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 3:53 pm
ChasingForever, Morris, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Yesterday influences today, thus creates tomorrow.&quot;- Ellen Hopkins<br /> &quot;Shoot for the moon, because even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars.&quot;-Les Brown

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By far my favorite!
ChasingForever said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 3:28 pm
ChasingForever, Morris, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Yesterday influences today, thus creates tomorrow.&quot;- Ellen Hopkins<br /> &quot;Shoot for the moon, because even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars.&quot;-Les Brown

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This is really good! Keep writing!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:52 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you so much!! That means a lot to me liv(: This was the first poem I wrote in years, and thats what started me writing. It is still my fav that I have done! 
BlottedInk said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:45 pm
BlottedInk, Searsmont, Maine
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&quot;The most wasted day of all is that on which we have not laughed.&quot; -Nicholas Chamfort

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OMG!! THIS IS THE BEST POEM I HAVE EVER READ!!! wow :) I love this poem it has feeling....and ....and...omg. its really great and keep writing so i can keep reading :)
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 3:21 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you Kes(:
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 8:48 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 189 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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it says the twisted version. do you have another version then?
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 8:45 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 189 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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...and....any chance you'd read my latest poem?  TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/574253/The-Problem-with-Problems/ thank yew!
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 8:43 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 189 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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That's fine. I still like it. :) keep on writing. 
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 8:12 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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The reply above was for you :3 ^
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 8:10 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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It is supposed to be vague, so that a wide array of people can relate to it. And thank you(: This was the first piece I wrote in years xD So I guess it is a little rough.
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 6:25 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 189 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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I love the second verse. The whole thing is very deep, but without your description about the piece, it's  little vague and ambiguous. (This can be a good thing though; it's up to you if you want it to be open-ended and it does work here.)