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Shell of Existance

September 3, 2013
By hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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I'm not exactly happy,
But neither am I sad,
I'm simply in existence,
Why is that so bad?

I see the sun is there,
I squint at blinding streaks.
I know the sun is there,
But I do not feel it's heat.

I see the wind is there,
Dancing through the trees.
I know the wind is there,
But I do not feel its breeze.

I see the snow is there,
An angelic shade of white.
I know the snow is there,
But i do not feel its bite.

I am like a floating shell,
Completely lost at sea.
I may strike you as unique,
But I am lost and empty.

I'm not exactly happy,
But neither am I sad,
I'm simply in existence,
Why is that so bad?

© Tatyana Z., Norwood, MA

The author's comments:
This poem inspired me when I felt nothing. When I wasn't happy or sad, or angry or anything. I was just... there. And then I look up at the sun, over the trees, and thought how pretty it was, but I was still cold.
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Nella.Girl97 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 13 2014 at 10:23 am
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
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&quot;Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart.&quot;

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Wow! amazing poem! I love the repition on the one verse..its just amazing! Great work!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:12 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you my dear
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:11 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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Wow this is how I feel sometimes I like how you repeat I'm neither happy or sad why is that so bad :3 it really pulls everything together as always brilliant job
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:00 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you Mckay!
Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 6:27 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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I really like this one. The metaphor is just is very good. The repition as well. And the title is perfect. 
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:43 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Repetitive is its style(: It is supposed to be, but thank you!!
BlottedInk said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:40 pm
BlottedInk, Searsmont, Maine
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&quot;The most wasted day of all is that on which we have not laughed.&quot; -Nicholas Chamfort

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wow i likeit !!!! i little repetitive, but very cute! :) Keep it up!!!!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 4:39 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you very much Hannah! That means so much.
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 4:37 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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This poem is brilliant. Everyone has felt this way- the emotion of feeling nothing is frightening, yet it happens to everyone. Your imagery is phenomenal and your rhyme scheme is very clever; Well done. Your a very talented writer!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 7:53 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.<br /> <br /> Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We&#039;re flexible like that (;

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Thank you Kes. Your input is valuble :)
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 6:23 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 189 comments

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-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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I really like it, Nik! It may not seem like it, but it's very relatable. I like the way you used parallel structure. Your rhyme scheme was a little flawed in a couple places, but it didn't disrupt the flow.