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December 1, 2013
By TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
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TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;When it&#039;s over, I want to say: all my life<br /> I was a bride married to amazement.<br /> I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms. <br /> <br /> When it is over, I don&#039;t want to wonder<br /> if I have made of my life something particular, and real.<br /> I don&#039;t want to find myself sighing and frightened,<br /> or full of argument. <br /> <br /> I don&#039;t want to end up simply having visited this world.&rdquo;

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It slipped vehemently into my darkest soul,
While beating to the rhythm of my heartbeats,
Trotting to the whistling melody of the hustling winds,
And beats throught the lyrical sounds of sorrow in the heat,
Crush these memories and fears,
Do dismember them from my hidden tears,
I need you to whisper to my ears,
That you'll plant those lights in my heartstrings,
In the veins of my desire,
Through the vessels of true hopes,
Breake those constant sounds of silence,
Which i can hear but i can't see,
Read me those continous nuances,
Show me the deadly requiems of my sealed hopes,
Save me from this deadly trapped of desire,
Vanish those angers and ires,
Promise me you would stay,
Even when our memories decay,
Tell me that everything is nothing but true,
And thus we shall walk down that silver foggy lane,
Looking at each other, Walking hands in hands,
As the sheer false illumination walk us through across,
But yet it's still too long way to fall,

© Kim B., Marblehead, MA

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TrishDestiny PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 2 2014 at 10:06 am
TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;When it&#039;s over, I want to say: all my life<br /> I was a bride married to amazement.<br /> I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms. <br /> <br /> When it is over, I don&#039;t want to wonder<br /> if I have made of my life something particular, and real.<br /> I don&#039;t want to find myself sighing and frightened,<br /> or full of argument. <br /> <br /> I don&#039;t want to end up simply having visited this world.&rdquo;

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Thank You Nella! It means a load to me!
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 2 2014 at 9:48 am
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 437 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart.&quot;

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amazinggggggggg!!
Steven_Hyde GOLD said...
on May. 5 2014 at 8:20 am
Steven_Hyde GOLD, Auburn, New York
17 articles 1 photo 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Just Do It&quot;<br /> - Nike<br /> &quot;An eye for an eye only makes the world blind&quot; <br /> - Ghandi

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this is great :D  
TrishDestiny PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 11 2014 at 9:26 am
TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;When it&#039;s over, I want to say: all my life<br /> I was a bride married to amazement.<br /> I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms. <br /> <br /> When it is over, I don&#039;t want to wonder<br /> if I have made of my life something particular, and real.<br /> I don&#039;t want to find myself sighing and frightened,<br /> or full of argument. <br /> <br /> I don&#039;t want to end up simply having visited this world.&rdquo;

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Thank you! That move me a lot, it motivate me to keep learning and learning, endlessly..
TrishDestiny PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 25 2014 at 1:37 am
TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;When it&#039;s over, I want to say: all my life<br /> I was a bride married to amazement.<br /> I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms. <br /> <br /> When it is over, I don&#039;t want to wonder<br /> if I have made of my life something particular, and real.<br /> I don&#039;t want to find myself sighing and frightened,<br /> or full of argument. <br /> <br /> I don&#039;t want to end up simply having visited this world.&rdquo;

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Thank you!!! That means a lot :) Lol its okay, you surely can use the diction as well!!! :)
haley101 DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 24 2014 at 12:28 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.&rdquo;<br /> <br /> ― Mary Oliver

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What Shahrier said. I really noticed an improvement! You have much more eloquent diction in this.
Shahrier PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 23 2014 at 11:59 pm
Shahrier PLATINUM, Colma, California
28 articles 10 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m a river that no longer flows&quot; - a friend<br /> &quot;when the people lead, leaders follow&quot; - Gandhi

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that was beautiful. but you know what blew me away? your diction and imagery is outstanding. "sounds of sorrow in the heat" and "veins of my desire" amazing. *i dont mean to plagerise, but i would like to use similar diction in my future work. :)
TrishDestiny PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 23 2014 at 8:42 am
TrishDestiny PLATINUM, Jerantut , Pahang, Other
45 articles 2 photos 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;When it&#039;s over, I want to say: all my life<br /> I was a bride married to amazement.<br /> I was the bridegroom, taking the world into my arms. <br /> <br /> When it is over, I don&#039;t want to wonder<br /> if I have made of my life something particular, and real.<br /> I don&#039;t want to find myself sighing and frightened,<br /> or full of argument. <br /> <br /> I don&#039;t want to end up simply having visited this world.&rdquo;

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Haley! Thank you!!!! Lol i have got still so much to learn and personally, i admire your works!! They are really amazing!
haley101 DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 9 2013 at 12:08 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.&rdquo;<br /> <br /> ― Mary Oliver

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Sophie! This is so beautiful. Truely. And TELL ME why you think that I'm a good writer, when this is just amazing??? I agree with everything written in it too :)