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Summer Bliss

December 13, 2013
By Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
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Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
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"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

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In the soft, lush green,
I settle under the welcoming shade of a tree,
gazing up at the endless, sparkling sky
accompanied by clouds, stretched and faded.

A gentle breeze plays with the shadows,
swaying them back and forth, slowly.

The sun glows with the warmth
of a friend,
enveloping me in summer bliss.

© Amanda B., Brookline, MA

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TheGirlUnknown SILVER said...
on Oct. 8 2014 at 1:04 pm
TheGirlUnknown SILVER, Winnfield, Louisiana
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Beautimus!  
Alycia. BRONZE said...
on Jan. 17 2014 at 6:18 pm
Alycia. BRONZE, Lower Gwynedd, Pennsylvania
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I love the imagery here! Such a great poem!
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD said...
on Jan. 7 2014 at 12:14 pm
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
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This paints a good image of summer. I would use a wider vocabulary for your adjectives. Also, the poem seems a little rushed and choppy. I think this is a very relatable topic. Good job overall. 
SeamanGlori BRONZE said...
on Jan. 4 2014 at 3:02 pm
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Its simplicity makes it beautiful. Fantastic work! However maybe use words that aren't so common, so the idea of "Summer Bliss" doesn't seem as ordinary. 
writing.is.my.life. SILVER said...
on Dec. 30 2013 at 3:13 pm
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I like this a lot.  It describes what you're trying to convey beautifully. A little choppy, but overall it's gorgeous writing! (:
GuardianoftheStars GOLD said...
on Dec. 28 2013 at 10:27 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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This was very well written.  I really liked the image you chose. It helped me picture the words more easily. 
Myvoice4change SILVER said...
on Dec. 28 2013 at 9:00 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
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thank you, yes I noticed that! do you have any suggestions for how I could make that better?:)
Cat521 SILVER said...
on Dec. 28 2013 at 8:17 pm
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There is a beautiful imagery about the piece that allows you to vizualize. Some phrasing seems a little choppy creating small gaps in the image. But it paints a beautiful picture, you really are an artist with words. 
NaaThompson GOLD said...
on Dec. 27 2013 at 6:47 pm
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  Great
AngelaAxelson GOLD said...
on Dec. 27 2013 at 5:04 pm
AngelaAxelson GOLD, Littleton, Colorado
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Very nice!
Mollybug16 BRONZE said...
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I love this! It feels like im actually there. Im giving you 5 stars. :)
author_musical PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 20 2013 at 8:22 pm
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good poem... i really like it!