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Remnants on The Mantle MAG

November 9, 2008
By Markmywords GOLD, Noblesville, Indiana
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Markmywords GOLD, Noblesville, Indiana
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I am not you,
just the remnants from
the mantle
of a deteriorating family,
whisked away by the man with
a crowbar and a blackening handle.
When we used to be a
threefold troupe,
and you stomped all over it
to crush the picture with your dirty foot.

It’s about time I rise up from
who you are.
I am so much more
than your deafening
resounds.
Bravery and risk taking
is who I am
and you are nothing
but the woman on the floor
crying over your spilled milk.
I am so much more.

© Louisa G., Chicopee, MA

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-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 9:57 am
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
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Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

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i love your sentence structure and word choice! Good metaphors also! :)
bbygurl21 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2010 at 1:50 pm
bbygurl21 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
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sticks n stones my brick my bones but words cant

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this is real good.
Babygurl_101 SILVER said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 8:46 pm
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
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this poem is so awesome!!! you did an excelent job~ keep writting, very powerful
sunnyhunny PLATINUM said...
on May. 17 2010 at 4:48 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Extremely powerful!
E.Lee GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 10:20 am
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500 stars! good job:)
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This piece is very deep. Love it! Especially the ending.
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on May. 23 2009 at 1:43 am
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i kno a person who seems to let of the same character in her writing.
KiKi3 SILVER said...
on May. 22 2009 at 5:32 pm
KiKi3 SILVER, Toledo, Ohio
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OMG- I love your poem. Really makes me think

Keep writing
Jaquie BRONZE said...
on May. 22 2009 at 11:32 am
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Nice job with this one. I love the title; it really speaks to me. I also liked the last line. Very, very, nice job. Congratulations on getting published. You've gone places in this that the rest of us can only dream of. Keep writing.

God Bless,

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EleanorRigby PLATINUM said...
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wow i feel like i can relate to it even though your inspiration is probably very different from what i'm thinking. great job!
Duckie430 said...
on Apr. 20 2009 at 7:15 pm
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wow. this is amazing.
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 19 2009 at 11:18 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
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WONDERFUL. makes people really think
LilJ<3 GOLD said...
on Apr. 10 2009 at 11:33 pm
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This poem was powerful in its own way... Great job and continue to write...Congrats on being published :).

♥ Jackie
foreverdreaming14 PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 9 2009 at 2:56 am
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This is such a touching poem, thank you for writing it.