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September 16, 2014
By simplyinferior GOLD, Ottawa, Illinois
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We all fall down,

one after the other

Some make a sound

others light as a feather

Water is pure, but wine is sweeter

When I step up to the plate,

I choose neither

take a hand from your brother

and hope it doesn't slip

Walk down this road together

and hope that you don't trip

The futer woven together by threads

some knotted forever 

others left for dead

You say that it is Nirvana you seek

so your days won't grow cold

your muscles never weak

the bitheness of it all 

could just be pretend

so when we all fall,

you'll find out in the end

© Dominique D., Ozone Park, NY

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writer-violist DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 8 2015 at 7:06 pm
writer-violist DIAMOND, Jenks, Oklahoma
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&ldquo;There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.&rdquo; <br /> ― Maya Angelou, I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings

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Hi! Great job on this poem! I like how it rhymes, how you put the cover image of a girl falling down, and the imagery in your poem. I also think that your line spacing is great because it really fits the poem and I enjoyed the poem. I like that for your first line you wrote, "We all fall down" because that is so true. Very nice. Write on! :)
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on Aug. 17 2015 at 5:47 pm
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
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Cool rhyme shceme. Watch your meter, it was inconsistent. Also, you have some spelling errors (bitterness, future). I really like the progression of the poem (it goes somewhere).