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The World's Great Beauty

March 31, 2015
By CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
53 articles 40 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what you believe in even if it means standing alone. -Andy Biersack<br /> Sometimes you gotta fall before you can fly. -Kellin Quinn<br /> You made me hate my own reflection. -Sleeping With Sirens


There is a great beauty in this world,
A beauty few notice or appreciate.
It is a beauty that is everlasting,
It most times goes unnoticed,
Unless you come upon it,
It’s not too difficult to come across.
You just have to be in the right place at the right time.
Some people don’t understand it,
But some do,
And the few that do know that it can be everlasting,
The beauty that goes unseen to most lives,
Is called love,
You can see it or hear it,
You may not even understand it,
But it’s there.
All you have to do is open your heart,
Let your heart see,
Then you will notice it.



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on Apr. 2 2015 at 11:33 am
CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
53 articles 40 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what you believe in even if it means standing alone. -Andy Biersack<br /> Sometimes you gotta fall before you can fly. -Kellin Quinn<br /> You made me hate my own reflection. -Sleeping With Sirens

Thanks AbigallGilgal, that's an awesome point, I'll try to fix that. Thanks for the review!

on Apr. 2 2015 at 11:32 am
AbigailGilgal GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I write for the same reason I breath- because if I didn&#039;t, I would die&quot;<br /> ~Isaac Asimov<br /> <br /> &quot;There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at the typewriter and bleed.&quot;<br /> ~ Ernest Hemingway

Pretty good! My main critique, not enough feeling. Maybe you could add some alliteration or just more descriptive words. If you describe it as "A silken rose, hidden in the shadows of our oblivion" instead of just "it most times goes unnoticed" The more description, the better. Just make sure not to put to much, you do not want a 4 stanza poem to turn into a 9 stanza. Overall, I really liked it. It is simple and clean, and the topic is beautiful. Keep writing!