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Child of the Snow (Snow Angel) MAG

June 29, 2009
By Elizabeth Ridolfi SILVER, Auburn, California
Elizabeth Ridolfi SILVER, Auburn, California
8 articles 0 photos 0 comments

You spin in diamond
Pale as the snow you came from
Spring sends you away



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on Jun. 22 2012 at 9:39 am
HeatherOlivia GOLD, Solothurn, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"All things truly wicked start from innocence." - Ernest Hemingway

haikus always get to me. I always find myself puzzling over hidden meanings and reading inbetween the lines. You told so much with so few words, I love it!

NathanB GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 5:03 pm
NathanB GOLD, Amherst, Massachusetts
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Great Imagery! Please look at some of my stuff.

on Dec. 7 2011 at 9:17 pm
G.Spangler BRONZE, Midland, Georgia
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A man is but what he thinks he is. What he thinks, he becomes.&quot; -Ghandi<br /> &quot;Do or Do Not, there is no Try.&quot; -Yoda

This was really good, the picture just adds to the imagery. Great work! :)

bullseye575 said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 11:42 am
that was a good little sory the hicus are the best

Merrdestm said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 11:29 am
I like this one because of the writers creativity.

on Feb. 24 2011 at 11:24 am
Alfred_Ribbons BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
3 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?

I love this Haiku :) But the word Diamond kind of through me off, because I always through it could be three syllables :p but I still liked it.

lollypops GOLD said...
on Dec. 20 2010 at 9:00 pm
lollypops GOLD, Pilot, Virginia
16 articles 5 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live

amazing i didnt lok at the title till  the end and at the end i was like wow she is talking about a snow angel then it was like wow i was right

on May. 6 2010 at 1:19 pm

This iz cool, i like it! :-D



Girl-Writer said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 11:01 pm

I thought these comments were supposed to be positive and constructive ;) Nice work Elizabeth. A very nice haiku - could I make a few pointers?? I'm going to anyway...

Try and create the meaning of the poem so that it skimms below the surface of the writing.

But anyway I think it's great!


Niccole SILVER said...
on Sep. 14 2009 at 4:19 pm
Niccole SILVER, Melbourne, Florida
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I like it a lot

on Sep. 7 2009 at 7:09 am
of course its simple... its a haiku poem.

duh.

on Aug. 19 2009 at 7:53 pm
sweet simple and beautiful

on Aug. 14 2009 at 1:31 am
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
26 articles 1 photo 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...&rdquo;

Very nice. Class all the way. Read my work? Please don't hesitate to comment. Thanks.

babe892 GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2009 at 7:22 am
babe892 GOLD, Suffern, New York
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The title of this reminded me of the Elliott Smith song "Snow Angel", so in reading it, I was almost expecting something similar just because the title sort of called that to mind. And let me tell you, I wasn't disappointed. Short, simple, to the point, but very poignant.

on Jul. 26 2009 at 9:20 pm
icguf615 BRONZE, Mission Viejo, California
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great haiku

on Jul. 26 2009 at 1:13 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
71 articles 2 photos 179 comments
Simple so simple! but soooo soooo beautiful...

on Jul. 21 2009 at 5:24 pm
AngelForeverBleedingLove DIAMOND, Frederic, Wisconsin
65 articles 3 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
You say you don&#039;t remember,<br /> But I will never forget

I really love how you can say what you want to in little words. it is perfect!

on Jul. 17 2009 at 12:00 am
yourworstnightmare BRONZE, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
4 articles 0 photos 96 comments

Favorite Quote:
The best prize that life offers is the chance to work hard at work worth doing. (Teddy Roosevelt)

that was sweet and simple. nice job!