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Does it Get Lonely?

February 10, 2014
By alioops SILVER, North Hollywood, California
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&quot;What moves men of genius, or rather, what inspires their work, is not new ideas, but their obsession with the idea that what has already been said is still not enough.&quot;<br /> - Eugene Delacroix

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Does it get lonely
on your throne up in the sky?
Your summers are cold.

Can you feel the wind,
does the cold rain dim your light?
Can it reach that high?

Have you been in love?
Must be dark being that bright;
have you seen the Spring?

© Amanda T., Scituate, MA

The author's comments:
I was sitting outside one day and I looked up at the sky. It was a clear day, no clouds in sight and the sun looked to me rather lonely. It seems like dreary existence living so far from everything, so distant. I imagined the sun looking down on everything: every family, every community, and watching children grow up and grow old. I can't imagine observing so many lives and never having the chance to live one; feeling close enough to touch it all, but knowing that you'd never be able to. I'd like to believe that the sun knows of its forever-long sentence to solitary confinement, that it was consciously aware when it was placed up there light years away from everything in sight. I'd like to believe that it can see me from up there, that knowing there is someone who understands brings it joy, that it's up there wishing I would stop referring to it as "it".
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alioops SILVER said...
on Jan. 22 2015 at 8:45 pm
alioops SILVER, North Hollywood, California
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;What moves men of genius, or rather, what inspires their work, is not new ideas, but their obsession with the idea that what has already been said is still not enough.&quot;<br /> - Eugene Delacroix

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Thanks for the feedback
SpidersAcrossStars PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 22 2015 at 8:17 pm
SpidersAcrossStars PLATINUM, Hayward, California
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3/5 I really liked to concept but personally would work on the execution. My favorite line is "must be dark being that bright" . That was amazing. reminded me of an that Steinbeck mentions in EOE about great things be lonely things.
alioops SILVER said...
on Nov. 29 2014 at 12:53 pm
alioops SILVER, North Hollywood, California
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;What moves men of genius, or rather, what inspires their work, is not new ideas, but their obsession with the idea that what has already been said is still not enough.&quot;<br /> - Eugene Delacroix

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Thanks so much for the feedback, I'm glad you liked it!
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Nov. 28 2014 at 9:12 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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&ldquo;I&#039;d rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I&#039;d rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye&#039;s a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example&#039;s always clear.&rdquo; -Edgar Guest

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There is a poetic lilt and romanticized overtone to the author's comments that absolutely sweeps away its reader with ponderings. Might have been published as a second poem, easily.
That being said, the work itself is decent. I like the new thought, of a cold sun alone in space watching from the distant sky. The line, "have you been in love?" is an interesting thought, but seems a bit out there, almost like it was introducing something else never expounded upon. Aside from that, its a good leanght, and its flow carries the reader right along through. I like it! Props to the writer!
alioops SILVER said...
on Nov. 26 2014 at 1:43 pm
alioops SILVER, North Hollywood, California
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;What moves men of genius, or rather, what inspires their work, is not new ideas, but their obsession with the idea that what has already been said is still not enough.&quot;<br /> - Eugene Delacroix

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Thanks SilverLiner! Yeah, I felt there was just so much to be said about it for the reader to fully imagine what I was imagining when I wrote the poem. Thanks again :)
SilverLiner said...
on Nov. 26 2014 at 6:40 am
SilverLiner, Accra, Other
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&quot;uhhhhhhhhh...&quot;

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the author's comments is actually way longer than the poem...lol  now to the poem; wow, it kinda has a subtle rythm. it's really good *thumbs up*
alioops SILVER said...
on Nov. 25 2014 at 9:10 pm
alioops SILVER, North Hollywood, California
8 articles 2 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;What moves men of genius, or rather, what inspires their work, is not new ideas, but their obsession with the idea that what has already been said is still not enough.&quot;<br /> - Eugene Delacroix

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Thank you!
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 25 2014 at 4:55 pm
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
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Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow <br /> -Ansem_Unlimited

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Hey this poem is very sad but very well written, most people try to create sadness by using things like suicide or death as a topic (not that there's anything wrong with that) but this is just genuine sadness without being super miserable.