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Into the Sea

September 27, 2009
By Hallow SILVER, Peru, Indiana
Hallow SILVER, Peru, Indiana
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Most people don't know how they're gonna feel from one moment to the next, but a dope fiend has a pretty good idea. They just look at the labels on the little bottles.


Another cigarette to calm the nerves
Adolescent mania tainted nerves
Drive down south into the country
So when I scream no one can hear me

Cause when I scream, into the unknown.
When I scream I wanna be on my own.
When I scream I never wanna go home.
What I mean, is I feel so alone.

Let's ditch town and never ever come back.
We'll go grow old and die of heart attacks.
Forget our old friends, they'll forget us in a flash.
I couldn't care less if at 99 we crashed.

And died in perfect harmony.
Two lost souls, romantic tragedy.
No life goals, for two hearts that beat
'til the vehicle wraps around a tree.

Come with me, we'll never come back.
I'll bring money so we won't run out of gas.
We'll drive all night watch the sunrise on the beach.
Let the rip tide take us out to sea.

We'll drown simultaneously.
We'll drown simultaneously.
We'll go down in history.
We'll go down, in perfect harmony.



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on Nov. 16 2009 at 2:55 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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This poem has great flow and insight.<br /> I really enjoyed it.<br /> Lovely poem darling =]<br /> -Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-<br /> XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

I love the repetitiousness of the last stanza

This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

XxThe Whole Time You Were Talking I Didnt Hear A Single Word You Said B/C Th3 Whole Time You Were Talking I Was Picturing You DeadXx

helly BRONZE said...
on Oct. 12 2009 at 12:32 am
helly BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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your poet are really,really good.

momiko BRONZE said...
on Oct. 11 2009 at 1:28 pm
momiko BRONZE, Carlsbad, California
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Epicwonderfulfantasticamazingbeautiful...

on Oct. 11 2009 at 9:45 am
TimeMachine SILVER, Mercer Island, Washington
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Oh my goodness. That was splendid.

I love every stanza because of the words you chose and the way you placed them.

This song is so powerful and it rolls off my tongue so easily. It's one of those lyrics that don't need a chorus because the words cling to the reader--the chorus is usually the part that sticks to a person's head, but everything in this song is catchy.

The rhyme scheme is so simple, but the way you organized your lines to portray the meanings seems difficult, which is a great feat.

Personally, I can't pick which stanza I like the best. I have to say, though, that the "We'll go down in history./We'll go down, in perfect harmony" is a splendid ending.

*tags as a favorite*

This is one of the best songs I've read.

Hope to read more of your work in the future.