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A Whispered Question/A Hopeful Breath

May 28, 2011
By dolphinportkey7 GOLD, D, Other
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"Because I knew you, I have been changed for good" AND "'Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all"

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I feel a breeze
It’s blowing across the sand
And I remember
(Oh) when you first took my hand
And you said to me
I just wanna spend eternity
With you…
A promise is like a star
It shows a future that’s not too far
(away)
It shows a place where the hurting stops
And only a single tear of joy drops
Across your face...
It’s been so long
Since then
We’ve been through so much
And I just want to know when
It’ll all
Just
Stop
And I can look into your eyes and stay there forever.

© Hannah S., Avondale, AZ

The author's comments:
Actually inspired by the songs of Utada Hikaru (but not taken from them), it goes to a pretty simple tune in my head. It has no refrain or anything, and it leaves an open ending; do the two people get to spend "eternity" together? I hope so...
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Destinee BRONZE said...
on Aug. 21 2011 at 1:31 am
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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I love this! I'm not a romantic person, but the rhythm is great and I like the line with the star. :) 
Shminkanator5000 SILVER said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 11:22 am
Shminkanator5000 SILVER, Rochester, New York
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Tagged that one as a favorite! Words can't describe how much I loved that piece! So much emotion built around it!