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Dancing In The Rain

June 10, 2011
By LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
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Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

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Dancing in the rain.
Dancing in the rain.
We were positively dancing in the rain.


Dancing down the block.
From the apartment to the shop.

The rain was falling down.
Down down down down down.

Skip stop hop.
Dancing in the rain.
The one good place where our hearts had felt no pain.

Dancing in the rain.
Dancing in the rain.
We were positively dancing in the rain.

Clear small voices ring.
As little girls we sing.
While dancing in the rain.
Positively dancing in the rain.

© Mary P., Norfolk, VA

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Friday, June 10, 2011
I have only just begun writing songs so any constructive criticism would be much appreciated.
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on Apr. 1 2012 at 4:47 pm
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Totally got a melody in my head while reading this. Nice job :) I like reading other song writers' works... gives me inspiration :)
BriRose2014 SILVER said...
on Apr. 1 2012 at 12:59 pm
BriRose2014 SILVER, Fremont, Nebraska
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when i was reading this, it reminded me of when i was a little kid. great work!
BriarRose PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 7 2011 at 7:32 pm
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Dancing in the rain is a great concept, and i'm actually liking the rhyme bit-you managed that without messing with the flow of the song. The longer lines were a tad awkward (they stood out b/c the rest were so short and sweet) but that might not be an issue. It depends on the music you set this to, really.

 

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