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Here Lies the Orange Rose

January 26, 2013
By HiddengoldTee SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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&quot;Procrastination was created to give you time for the things that you&#039;d otherwise have no time for&quot;<br /> -Me

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Paper mâché and eyes blue glazed
You pull me close
I move with you, life's just a faze.

And with your voice
Soft as baby's breath
You tell me you're not ready.
Petals tremble in the heat
Your shell soon to be empty

And you loved life
Too much, they say
And the world would love
For one blossom's stay

But you have to go,
The season's done
The petals fall
To where they come

Few are left i watch them close
Around you, dismiss you
And here lies the orange rose,

The thing you left behind.

© Jordan K., Oxford, GA

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When a person dies they are alive-it's just their shell that's empty.
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HiddengoldTee SILVER said...
on Mar. 11 2013 at 12:27 am
HiddengoldTee SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
7 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Procrastination was created to give you time for the things that you&#039;d otherwise have no time for&quot;<br /> -Me

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Very true thank you for your comment! The problem is I don't want my rhyming poems to go under "free verse" (even though they are). There woul be less of this is there was a section labelled "rhyming free verse" or something like that...
HiddengoldTee SILVER said...
on Jan. 31 2013 at 4:07 pm
HiddengoldTee SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Procrastination was created to give you time for the things that you&#039;d otherwise have no time for&quot;<br /> -Me

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Thank you :) I think it's my favorite
gfukes GOLD said...
on Jan. 31 2013 at 1:23 pm
gfukes GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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&quot;Sometimes, if you stand on the bottom rail of a bridge and lean over to watch the river slipping slowly away beneath you, you will suddenly know everything there is to be known.&rdquo; <br /> -Winnie the Pooh

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ooh... I really like...the descriptions are awesome!! (& also the orange rose tht is not pink lol) it's got a really calming, ethereal cadance to it that I love:)
Sonnetman said...
on Jan. 31 2013 at 7:07 am
No offense, but what qualifies this to be a sonnet? Am I missiog something? What you have is nice and creative, but it's not a sonnet. Remember -- 14 lines of iambic pentameter in three quatuains and a couplet, wiwth rhyming scheme of abab cdcd efef gg (Shakespearean) or Petrarchan - octave and sestet -- abbaabbba cdcdcd or cdecde. There's more, but you get the point. Good writing!