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When the Darkness Comes

September 1, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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&quot;Don&#039;t gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold.&quot; <br /> <br /> &quot;You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer.&quot;

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The darkness surrounds me and persuades me,
trying to swallow me whole.
Its' eyes and face is iced over,
and its' heart is blacker than coal.

The beating of my steady heart
tries to save me from my doom.
But inside of me I helplessly plead
that this will all end soon.

The shadows creep up upon me,
and turn the light away
The flowers and the sun
won’t be returning today.

So when the darkness covers me
and the time on the clock ticks dry,
I’ll surrender myself to the ground
and let my soul ascend to the sky.

The author's comments:
I wrote this at 12:15 in the morning when I woke up from a nightmare. The idea just sort of came to me, and I wrote this within 5 minutes :) Hope you like it, and please leave comments! :)
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AubreyTRieder PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 4 2009 at 6:55 pm
AubreyTRieder PLATINUM, Clark, New Jersey
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this one is really good... I love the rhythm of it and just the feeling of impending doom... it's really deep.

the only thing is that, sorry for saying this but i'm really picky bout things like this, is that "doom" and "soon" don't rhyme... otherwise i love it! and it's just something 2 remember for future poems... i love them all and keep writing!
icguf615 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 4 2009 at 10:43 am
icguf615 BRONZE, Mission Viejo, California
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amazing i love it my fav of yours by far
cheyb88 SILVER said...
on Oct. 4 2009 at 10:01 am
cheyb88 SILVER, Saint Joseph, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
The lunatic, the lover, the poet, are of imagination of all compact. -William Shakespeare<br /> <br /> So don&#039;t worry, because I am with you. Don&#039;t be afraid, because I am your God. I will make you strong and will help you. I will support you with my right hand that saves you.<br /> Isaiah 41:10<br /> <br /> &quot;Expectation is the root of all headaches&quot;- William Shakespeare<br /> <br /> &quot;Here take my Elmo&quot; -Chloe&#039;<br /> <br /> &ldquo;If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it doesn&rsquo;t, then it was never meant to be.&rdquo;

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Wow great again!! I love the style of writing you have! It makes you really unique. I love it keep it up :)
Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 8:01 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
What the front door.

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I like your poems. i know that doesnt say alot but i mean alot. you should keep writing. you got talent. but i'm sure you already know that. peace out.
PinkPrincess GOLD said...
on Oct. 1 2009 at 8:34 pm
PinkPrincess GOLD, Wellington, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
I think therefore I am

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you are a really wonderful poet all your poems seem to have that depth that is just amazing
werecatt BRONZE said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 10:33 pm
werecatt BRONZE, Junction City, Kansas
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hay I like this a lot! Love how the rhyming scheme makes it flow so well. It makes me feel like sleeping-really cool
MariaMarie DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 2:32 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life&#039;s a mountain on a beach&quot;-Unknown<br /> &quot;Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It&#039;s remarkable how often those two traits coincide.&quot;-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

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I really love this!!! The rhyming, the words- it fits together nicely. I love the last two lines most :) Could you read two poems of mine? one's called "Destruction's Shadow" The other is "Darkness" but i just sent it in and I'm not sure when it will go through.. You are a really talented writer!