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September 24, 2010
By forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
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forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
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"Fear will never overcome you, if your will to succeed is strong enough" From "The greatest salesman"

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What is this silence that deafens me? What is this darkness that binds, blinds, and closes aroung me? What is this pit of emptiness within me? What can my heart see that my mind and eyes can not? What is this that I hold so close?? Is it my tears that reveals my deepest fears? Or my heart that shows our secrets from that night?

© Stephanie C., Gaithersburg, MD

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Im not really sure about this one. This is just a rough draft. I wanted to get some opinions on how it sounds and grammar. I wrote this in the middle of spanish class. I think I want to love, but cant.
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forbiddenxwords SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 11:44 pm
forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Fear will never overcome you, if your will to succeed is strong enough&quot; From &quot;The greatest salesman&quot;

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Your words are easier said than done :) but I will do my best for you :) Thank you for the comment :)
forbiddenxwords SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 11:44 pm
forbiddenxwords SILVER, Van Nuys, California
5 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Fear will never overcome you, if your will to succeed is strong enough&quot; From &quot;The greatest salesman&quot;

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Im not that good. Im a newbie to this poetry thing. But I thank you for your kindness. Iwish I could get more comments so iknow what to make better :). Again I thank you
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 3 2010 at 8:02 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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It's so easy to love, if the love is true. Just love, my dear, and all the rest will work itself out.
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 3 2010 at 8:01 pm
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I, also, enjoyed reading this. It's written in a very interesting manner, and I love the cleverness/descriptiveness of each line. I couldn't have expressed the feeling better myself.
drowning-in-sorrow GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2010 at 5:57 pm
drowning-in-sorrow GOLD, Randallstown, Maryland
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I really enjoyed readin this. Keep up the good work.

It sounds like you hv been hurt in the past but u still want love. Its not easy to trust people but give it time. I wrote some poems on love. Not tht good but feel free to check it out.